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need to work on catching name mistakes. but otherwise I am thoroughly enjoying this book

the story has potential, but the bad translation/ Grammer/sentence structure puts me off immensely.

names are being switched. last chapter the wild was being called Dream and this chapter it's Shadow. which is it's real name or name to be kept?

you may want to consider changing the word "atrocious" to something else as it means something is really bad, but in the context you used it I think you meant really good. you used it about halfway into this previous chapter when he was sparring with little tiger

your welcome. I'm really enjoying it!

found 2 word mistakes. the 1st with the gnome you put snob instead of snub and the 2nd was pact instead of pack when Ren reminded Leo he needed to pack still and it was getting late overall loving the book so far !!

the book has some good potential. But there are many mistakes so far. Pronouns are interchanged for Lin's friend. Words are used in place of others that make no sense or change the context and meaning of what was meant. As well as items and animals are switched up within a mere few words of each other such as a few stray dogs suddenly become a pack of wolves.

I've seen reviews where they say this another boring system novel, but I can't say it's like that at all. I haven't come across many with a blacksmithing system. and it avoids most of the op mc gains everything in an eye blink. he puts in actual hard work, hrs and hrs of it. yes his system does distort time a bit so he grows a bit faster, but he still put in the real work needed to get to where he is. I can't wait for the next chapters to come out!!

enjoying the book so far. my only "complaint" would be the chapters are a bit short

the story and design isn't bad. but the Grammer and person pronoun changing every other time a male or female is mentioned give me a headache. the flow of sentences and paragraphs are a bit off as well. sometimes extra or rather doubles of words are added in odd places and throw off the flow even more. honestly there is potential but if you can't get around odd Grammer and gender switches on the fly for the same person then I don't recommend it's read.