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Thanks bro, luv ur review! :3
Damn, I love it. The story, progression, everything. You wanna feedback? You don't need to, just continue to do what ya doin'... Writing quality is good, maybe a few mistakes here and there but the story covers them all so you don't even feel irritated at all... Development of the story has hooked u up from the start, where it flows slowly and perfectly. I like Soren's, sometimes humorous comments, and the world's background is well thought out. Overall, this story deserves more than just a few views. Continue in your work, I'll be watchin'...
I'm here for a review :3 So, due to having only 5 chaps, I can't give much, but I'll try... Right in the first chap, I saw some minor, let's say "mistakes..." But it's nothing that can't be fixed :3 Sadly, sometimes, I felt like... I was reading a newspaper article... It's not 'cause of the story but rather due to almost everything being glued together... Personally, after each sentence, I give a space and use a new line= "words that Mc or other character say" who said that and what expression, gesture, or tone they used/did. "And a new line"... "and again..." ..... ........ - space for the story... Mc might walk somewhere with others so I explain/describe that... Between that, I'll throw some dialogue again, etc... U know? Use some space, it will look better, and even when the story is not boring, after I saw those glued-up articles, I felt bored... trust me... It's our natural thing... We don't wanna read long and boring stuff... and even if it isn't boring, our mind already thinks that from just seeing it... But if you divide it, it will look easier and give your story more "space for breathing" as I say... Anyway, also, u might use some definition/boundary for your Mc's thoughts. "..." = Dialogue, things you say in our normal voice... '...' = This might be the sign for things your Characters say with their inner voice, thoughts they think about, etc... It will brighten your story a bit as well... [Don't take this as a criticization, rather understand it as a way how I'm trying to help u :3 ] And now the review itself... I really liked your story~ The writing quality is good [like your description style] and only saw minimal minor mistakes here and there... 5 fallin' stars for that :) Stability? IDK, I'm here for the first time and read this in one row- I'll give u 5, 'cause I can :3 Story development is a surprise tho, [for me at the very least], and I actually like that, but it's cut in the best [awaiting more] 5 for that... Character and World design and background are the same ... [Good yet I miss more chaps] [But 'cause I little roasted u at the start, I'll give u five... If not, I would give u 4] And that's it, hope u like it... Work on yourself and understand that the critique was necessary for your progress. I am glad I could read your story, see ya in the forum :3
Damn, this is something I didn't see on Webnovel often... Interesting plot, sometimes a funny MC [at least for me], and a world filled with intrigue... Looking forward to seeing more...
Damn, the first chap hit me like a truck... It was a long time since I read something sad, tho it was needed for the progress of the story. I love it, first chap hooked me up, and I let the story drive me through your work like a black muscle car through the town of Ghosts. Overall, due to not having enoguh chaps, I can't release a full review like I want to, but this story has a potential to shine... Don't let it go, this is your chance to prove yourself... I'll be watching...
I love this! Dark themes, psychological mind games, and questions that can pull your worst doubts out of your filthy mind~ If you are ready for some dark ride while finding quite interesting answers about your existence, check this out... But I warn you... It might give you goosebumps~
Thank you for your kind words~
Thanks, trying to hold the words at 2500 per chap. So that's why... plus I'm also cutting off useless stuff... But, again, thanks for support...
Thanks brother, I'll do~
As always, UelUel is here to make my day... Dang, do I even need to tell you that This Story Is F* Good?! If you don't trust me then choose to read it - [This belongs to everyone who is trying to skip it or read the reviews before diving into this masterpiece!!!] ------------------ Now's time for the actuall review. As always, Uel's sentences makes my lungs cry in pain while I'm dying from laughter... five for that... Stability? Even when I read this in one day, I trust, (just as with all your novels) that your stability is as good as I know it. Development? A cute Fluffy on his adventures... What can be more cute than that? = Five for that... Charcet design? Same as Development = Fluffy's cutness saves everything [5 for that] World background = I like the world where Fluffy secretly operates :) Five for that... Overal, PLEASEEEE CONTINUE UEL!!! I need more!!! <3 <3 <3