GreatMageHarkan

So everyone is either Jedi or Sith

Can anyone explain this to me? Mother Wang or Li Xiumei? Is it two people or just one? wtf is this?

maybe he stinks

This is based on a chinese novel, in chinese culture as well as some other cultures, like my culture, Brazil, it's very common to call people as brothers, uncles, aunts, etc, so long as there is some level of intimacy.

He doesn't care = It doesn't matter that it happens, that the police can't do anything to stop it nor the society, what he cares about is that it's happening in front of him because it's disgusting. Hope this clarified the issue.

it's brother in the same sense as when you call a close friend 'bro'

Point out the mistakes, I can't fix what I don't know about, thanks for the review.

So, having finished the first chapter, the thing that irks me is grammar, there are many easy mistakes easy to be fixed, mostly related to past tense. But the premise of the story is good, I feel it has potential. If you need an editor, give me a call either here or on Facebook. I can make your 'baby' easier to read for an English-speaking audience, I'm not the best at this kind of thing, but people generally praise my grammar in the many novels I've written over the years. Anyway, good luck.

Sorry. Who?

Shouldn't it be "...was what Gu Chen..."?