can't be fadING or can't have faded [it's how english works idk the technicalities] the second one kind of irks me because it doesn't make sense in context [my opinion idk if it's wrong exactly but it seems off]

I pointed out a few things that could be changed in the first ch. I suggest you download grammarly and add it as an extension to your chrome browser. That's what helped me proofread my work faster.

"Can't have faded" "eyesight has dulled"

first line: punctuation errors

lowercase "yes"

"ages" is a collective noun maybe use "how many decades/centuries"

1st line: had third line: new sentence instead of comma

am going to free you from your suffering

"in a trance" in place of "in the trance state"

omit "and" and begin a new sentence it feels more natural like that

of course!! I'll be taking some time with it though :")

Thank youu so much!!

"stakes" *wiggles eyebrows* was the pun intended?

Twilight meets Beauty and the Beast! Love Elsa already and I'm barely ten chapters in. Her pure innocence is honestly so refreshing! I can't wait to see how her personality contrasts with our MC. A small complaint is that there are a few grammatical errors, but it doesn't ruin the overall reading experience. Honestly, I'd say it doesn't even matter, especially when the plotline is so interesting. Great work author!!

No, no! Don't apologize! I had fun reading your book.

Thank you so much!! I'll look into the typos.

Thank you so much, I’ll look into it asap :) !!

Okay so um I like the idea of the story, it's pretty creative. The characters are pretty well-written. Overall, I'd say that the book is great, probably because I'm biased cuz I'm a sucker for reincarnation stories. However, there are a few things that the author must consider: Given that this is your first novel, it's pretty great. Definitely could use some edits here and there, but nothing that can't be resolved by proofreading. The situation setting is described beautifully but there are places where it's awkward (?) Perhaps it's due to over-explaining it, I'm not really sure. Conversations sometimes feel stunted, as if it's something that they wouldn't say in that situation (?) It doesn't disrupt the flow of the story, but it's sort of annoying sometimes. [I'm so sorry author T-T] Anyways, I hope you take my words with a grain of salt and use it further improve your writing skills. Let's all learn from our mistakes and become the next Rick Riordan :> !! Great work author, keep it up!!

stop so cute

I read a couple of chapters and I'm completely entranced by your writing style. The imagery is just *chefs kiss* It almost feels like I'm IN the book, experiencing everything Marco is going through. Great work author, definitely looking forward to future updates!!