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It needs improvement; first of all, a secondary character's point of view shouldn't last so long when the reader already knows what is happening, and certainly not entire chapters. For the MC's age, he sometimes feels like a child in some parts, and the story progresses slowly.
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Seriously? MC is scared of your old boss with the power he has now.
you haven't read much is it?
Get to work
The author is still alive?
It's almost excellent, I just hope they don't abandon it, one improvement that could be to go deeper into the secondary characters, in the romance part, she falls in love very quickly, if so, why? it needs to give more context.
I just hope that he is not a pathetic MC and that he can forgive those who betrayed him.
Autor: Por que no hacer un patreon y así hacer capítulos semanas( entre 2 o 3)😉?