IsekaiLord

Hopefully mc only goes with marika. If I remember well, Marika is not herself in the story.

Bahaha, webnovel authors and their novel writing mcs. Well, at lesst you guys can live out sour dreams in fanfics, being a popular novelist and all

Just make a relatiomship with the maid fr

Wow, they fought for a whole month!

Red eyes, she is red eyed

I’m not trying to hate on you, or on your writing. And its not about creativity, more so about the way it reads. The whole story so far was: Axel did this, Axel knew that, Axel believed in this, Axel saved that. There was never really a sense of predicament, nor was there a surprise. It was all so 2 dimensional and predictable(being predictable is not always bad), that you just read through it, and you have no sense of fulfilment. There is no character dev, nor any significiant side character dev. Not one of the side characters created any impact on me. Fml was really just a decoration, 3 chapter, and after that a few monolouges. But these are really just my opinions, its up to you how you take them.

I know you wrote this story mostly like this but really, its just bugging me how much it reads like a gpt generated story. Plus, its really just wish fulfillment from this point on isn’t it

Mc is trash, writing is trash, pacing is trash, all of the characters have this basic akikan sht, where mc is better than them all(at everything), and side characters all feel inferior, and all women will open their legs to him and sht. This the type of sht you should avoid. Absolutely dumb, dumb way to make an interesting story. And leave harem alone bruh, most people are into normal romance nowadays.

The process took a while, it was slow, took a while, took a while…. Blud sou repest yourself too much, get to the point

Ah blud every ody just makes fun of this xd