TheCalm_One
Just your average person who likes to live.
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Took you long enough! You did reflect on some of my past points but I still think that you are only focusing on the characters and the environment surrounding them is lifeless. Try to explain the place where the characters are. If you want an example, you can read any page of lord of the mysteries and see how cuttlefish makes the environment more alive by adding background characters yelling in bars and local places, explaining the environment, air, forest, inns etc. Though I don't expect it to be on the same level as Cuttlefish, just try at least. You had a great opportunity for it when the mc was riding in the carriage but you missed it. This imagery is very important for a full fleshed novel.
I have only read upto ch 14. Thus, these are just some of my suggestions and first time thoughts. 1. The Story is well better than most isekai stories present on this platform(I expect nothing less from a lovecraftian story) 2. The world has not been introduced much yet and I expect it to be above average. 3. The writing quality is below average but there are not many grammatical errors. It is really simple and feels like it is thrown right to your face. I suggest you try to explain some of the scenes more vividly using examples and add more impact using vocabulary( use in moderation ) 4. It's been 14 chapters and yet I have no idea, how the mc's room look like. Try to explain the background more. It will increase your word count. 5. You can also add some philosophical ideas here and there to increase the word count. If you work on some parts, it can turn into a pretty good novel. I can guarantee it and please don't drop it
Author, I hope you will not abandon this novel like your other novels. I sort of enjoyed it despite some minor plotholes like how Regis was able to read and write despite living in slums(which might have a reason which you will explain in future chapters) and how Regis survived when he was unconscious during second awakening because he had to kill in a minute and he was unconscious for quite some time
You really like the word tapestry.
bro you should have added it in a bracket. it would have lightnend our mood. Comedy is always welcome
queens bridge? or some other place?
Doreamon
I would've uninstalled life at that point😂
Thank you for the info, dear Author
Frank Lee 2.0💀. The real main character of the Forsaken Sovereign
Why did they add wine to a child's meal?
Bro raised a flag like it was independence day 💀🤣
fool?
even after 19 years! Anyway, thank you for your response dear author
Corruption at its finest in India😂💀
if a slice of chocolate cake is ruined, then you are ought to get revenge.
Bro is acting like a pro genie😂
-_- Ignis is like," I don't know this lunatic. I am just an innocent bystander commoner."😂