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liked the concept and all that, its just why does the main character not make anything of the memories he was given by the allspark? i mean i get it, if he made anything revolutionary and it got to the wrong hands, its gonna be a bad thing! but cant he like make a base for himself? i mean he can take a forest and make it cybertronian metal in a second(though it was accindental), like he can find a cave and do that and he has a secret base to make do of the memories he got and make life and shit. but no all he does is run around making super cars! thats awesome and all but why does he have to search for scrapped car parts? again he can make metal out of anything and its gonna be tougher than any earth metal he can find! if your're gonna doubt what i said and say he has to find the parts he cant make, well it was mentioned in the story that the main character has the memories of all the dead tramsformers, im assuming the primes are parts of those memories AND if im not wrong solus prime is in there to who by the way is a blacksmith and imventor. im pretty sure he make all the parts he needs. and then theres the later parts of the story! i mean i get that you want us to know how prime got matrix of leadership and how megatron became megatron, but come on! the story was just getting interseting for the main character! he was getting chased by megatron, theres the mysterious queen of the forest transformer, and then she and optimus meets for the first time and then the revelation that the original vessel for the allspark is in the hands of the military, and you gave us a big cliff hanger in the form of a very very long arc wow!!! youre amazing( its long beacuse the update speed is abbysmal)
i liked how the story started except the situation where eric woke naked in a man's room naked. that was so random. bit i kept reading, it was okay. and then theres tony stark at the park scene, i cant picture him being like that all flamboyant and stuff, im more use to him being the sarcastic but funny of a person he is. and hes just randomly in a park being cheesy about painting beauty or something, and then he laments hes old but no one even mentioned him being old, and i mean come on hes like in hes 30s or something in that time frame right?(correct me if i'm wrong). but then in chapter nine towrds the end of the chapter, it just like cut of a whole scenario. like when stryker and eric were just meeting for the first time, and then next thing you know strykers on the ground with a metal bracer oround hes neck out of breath. it didn't even mention how he got there, he just shouts how they got to know about him. i mean stryker's supposed to be cunning right? how can he shout the way they monitor the mutants in a fit of anger if hes supposed to be cunning? i mean hes a leader of a branch of hydra, and you dont get to be part of hydra if youre not smart enough to hold that position. and then it just cut's off to another scene to where the mutants comeback because they heard that stryker raided the x-mansion(they were fighting magneto when stryker attacked the mansion) and then it just cut's off AGAIN!!! to eric letting stryker go. and hes suppose to be a ruthless person(hes a reincarnator whos been fighting for a long time woth other reincartnator's in a strong eats the weak kind of world for a god). and then he says they find it hard to accept his decision. what desicion!? it didnt even mention anything about the aftermath of the fight it was just him staring at mystique as she smiles at him. and thats another thing, why is mystique in the x-mansion when she and magneto is supposed to be enemies with the x-men? i get it, she and the proffesor were friend's but shes at least going to be confined in ther right? i mean there enemies.
who shouted this?
thats the fathers name, and its ryuta
jarvis server isn't even remotely close to that world, how would jarvis function if he doesn't have his core data?
liked the concept, just didn't like how fast the story is going, there's barely any dialogue going on any chapters
the strongest character there is.
His just now going give him a name adter two months?
Isn't wife supposed to husband instead?
Like the story it's just he has alot of Dialogues its iritating how long it goes