DaoistgNTUEK2

Great writing and story, but I would not agree that it is complete. It ends abruptly without true resolution, and I don’t like starting something I can’t ever finish.

The story does not produce an emotional connection with the characters or the story. It has good potential, but had it been any longer, I probably wouldn’t have finished it because it feels rushed and underdeveloped.

I would give it a zero if I could, just to let you know that only the intro remains and the rest is posted elsewhere. Don’t get interested in the beginning because it’s not nearly finished.

Probably a good story line, but I cannot get past the writing - jumbled timeline, strange dialogue, and unnecessary explanations of certain topics. There was too much that didn’t make sense so I eventually couldn’t finish it.

Well…I did not expect expect this chapter to end on that note. I’m most pleasantly surprised & can’t wait to read what happens next! 😏

Thank the Luna Kane & the missus live!

No! He can’t go yet! 😭

Agreed! Love that small moment of fireworks at the end!

So glad they weren’t kidnapped or killed 🙌🏼

She’s a force to be reckoned with! Don’t stop now, Aila!