Sporanium

For the POV, you can make it like this whole chapter is from James and the next chapter is from the other perspective. So you don't need to mention who is the POV currently. Each character has a characteristic, use that to your advantage for the reader to be aware that if you mentioned that certain characteristic they will know who it was. I can't comment on how you should do to the story pace because it's just my preference, so it's better to think about it yourself [img=recommend]

The story development is too slow, and the point-out pov was too much annoying from my point of view. But the character development, I feel like the character inside was a real person. The dialogue is surreal and it's comfortable to read. Kudos to the author! Keep up the good work!

The world building, there's no much that I can say because there's only 4 chapters in it, but it seems the world take at medieval era. The writing quality is good. Overall it's good to read but the update stability kinda slow. Keep up the good work!

Kinda unexpected

Ooh, a half-angle

The way the author write is kinda unique, using himself as a narrator and describing the situation work. But it's confusing on it's own, the way the author use punctuation is a mess. And too much "tell" that make it bland. But the story was good, the concept of revenge are neatly arranged with nerdy past of mc. Overall, it's decent to read.

Kinda wondered, who's liver Zuhaib pull?

The writing quality are good, but there's too much 'tell' on it. The world building feels like Twilight, So imagining it kinda easy, the pace and the story development is slow. Sometimes, I confused by sudden change of point of view. Overall, it's good to read. [img=recommend]