Thanks. I hope I figure it out too... you'd think they'd want me to upload???

Hello. Author here. For some reason, I cannot update "Magic in the Family". Webnovel's software won't allow me. I apologize for the inconvenience while I attempt to get to the bottom of this. I will aim to have a double update this Thursday. :(

It's been two paragraphs and I like this guy.

Haha. That's fair. No piece of writing is perfect, and subjective taste is valid. I'll update the chapter titles tomorrow. Thanks for the advice. Hope you'll stick around for Soren's story.

Creepy

Quick note on dialogue punctuation: , belong inside the dialogue tag. Wrong: "Please stop staring at me", he said, hiding his face behind his wings. Correct: "Please stop staring at me," he said, hiding his face behind his wings. A small thing, but it will make your grammar better. :)

An isekai with death leading to brutal penalties followed by a "re-load" back in time. Heavy focus on gore: if that's your thing, you'll find enjoyment here. After the first chapter, the writing quality picks up. Chapter one was hard to follow as the dialogue isn't tagged, there are too many unknown characters, and the scene has no context. However, once the second chapter hits, the scenes have flow, and the characters have both motivations and context. As of chapter seven, there doesn't seem to be a clear "main goal" beyond "complete quests to level up, and level up to complete quests." However, there are indications of larger powers at play.

Yeah... I'd probably have the same reaction.

Any suggestions on how I can increase my score?

Mom for the win!

Let's go, Mom!!

wonder how long she'll stick around for... or how long it will take her to start doing things to make his life worse so he'll want to go back to his old life.

Noted. Not going to do any "re-writing" for the time being, but I'll keep the paragraph thing in mind as I keep writing. Thank you for the review. :)

Thank you for the kind words. Hope you stick around for Soren's story. :)

This one is going on the reading list. While the piece is standard isekai, there are enough new concepts - such as the means by which the MC goes to "another world" - that the piece feels fresh. Also, there are drangs. I like dragons, so huge plus on that front. :)

Hmmm... that doesn't seem healthy. XD

Thanks for the review. I'll work on my style moving forward. :)

Daw. Thank you. <3

That doesn't sound healthy -_-

Like BL with pretty men, a flustered "bride", and fantasy vibes? If yes, then you'll enjoy the read. The writing quality is solid, with few grammatical errors and pros that flow. While predictable for the genera, the story has momentum and doesn't drag. The character designs are pretty and highlight the romance.