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The writing is good and smooth. The story is a bit confusing. The second and third prologues are long and somehow add to my confusion. But when the story begins, things become clearer. The world background needs to be more explained. It is a multi-realm background and should be taken one by one to be understandable for readers. At first, many characters do many things in many places. Try to focus on the MC from the beginning and let her discover the realms by herself. The first prologue is a good start, but if the first chapter began with Luna, maybe it would be simpler and easier because I really had a hard time tracking the story. All the best.
Why did he go by himself? he could have ordered someone else to go.
So Nakul spent 40 years to do his task and still trying to?
Nice poem
you are totally right
The writing is good and simple to understand. The story development is a bit slow. The first chapter introduces the ML only. There is no action but the fight with a bully which gets solved easily. Give the lead an ambition and let him suffer to achieve it. It was said that the main character had some sort of great power. It will be nice to have him discover himself through tough experiences and not give him the power easily. Overall it is a fun read.
she was certainly going to be fired.
Wow! Nice move.