GreenRaven

fantastic story. would read more. make sure to write more, i only vote for people that write well and to far? FANTASTIC![img=golden ticket][img=exp]

You think there would be a way to put him around the main cast? and mc/ who?

It's actually a fantastic start for a story. If there was a story I'd like to see put into like form it would be this one! Please continue! ! ! ! !!

this is the most fantastic fanfiction i've read in a long time. If anyone is wondering if this story is good or bad due to it being a translation, than, worry not; because, this story is the best.

Same old, same old story is the exact same to the cannon from what i read up to 150 chapters. Uchiha massacre still happens and mc somehow doesn't care, even though their teammate was an Uchiha. It gets boring and repetitive after 100 chapters. I thought this story was going to be a good one for the first 100 chapters but sadly its just fallowing Canon. The reason im giving it 1/5 stars is because I hate fanfictions that can't make their own plot and instead makes it a copy of canon. I don't read fanfictions to be reminded of the stupid and plot points of canon. that and it makes no sense for mc to not do anything during the massacre. He was literally a borderline couple with an uchiha. Not to mention it takes around 100 chapters for him to make it to chunin even though the story never deviated from training, missions and combat. In the whole of 100 chapters there was no filler. dropped.

this is actually of great quality. I hope this is continued for a long time.

it's good. writing quality is of decent status and this story has a good plot to it. I love the way you did the underdog trope with the main character. it's very unique. how he gets stronger is more realistic than other stories and is satisfying.

what about jaune having an extended family.

I love the skill at which the story is written and I also like the premise of the story. the one problem I have is the fact that the mc isn't getting attached to people like a human would. he's just letting things happen as if he wasn't there. Not only did he let the world stay on track; but, he also made sure to manipulate the situations to make sure the atrocities happen. that is not how a person is unless the guy is a sociopath.

and all for some information the mc might not even ever use. like who cares if the MC knows about Naruto being the QB if he's never going to even interact with Naruto or something like that.