Hey, I read the first chapter and I must say, you have done an incredible job setting up the plot. The idea is quite intriguing and I'm going to continue reading it. Well done. Keep writing!

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Heyy, I just started reading your book and this is so interesting. Poetry has always been something I have been intrigued by, so this book is a YES for me. You are doing a very good job. Keep going.!!

I love the "place to love the unloved" part.

BROOO, I love the way you write. It has a very smooth and unique flow. You got loads of talents. Keep writing. Your story has the drama, the intensity, basically anything a reader will ask.

I love the hook, super intriguingg

Hey, so I read the first two chapters. The plot is quite interesting and very well set. I love the way you have written the story. It has a smooth flow. Keep writing!!

Use smth else instead of perk, it doesn't go well with the scenario you're creating

It would sound better if you say her footsteps echoed in the darkness

So far I am loving the concept. And the title is catchy too. I love how you stitch everything together to make complete sense. It's just a suggestion, maybe break down the chapters more? It just makes readers feel more satisfied with themselves when they read more chapters if that makes sense. Keep writing! I am so proud of you!!!

Break down the sentence, it is a runoff.

Removing has would be better

Ahaha love that

I am confused. Is he already into corporate lifestyle or not?

✨The story of my life ✨

The Vivian and Allery part is confusing. I would suggest clearing this scene out more.

Thank you for taking out the time to read!

Thank you for your feedback!

lied down on her bed and buried

take the comma off