Biscuit_willieon

this novel has many problems. One of these problems is the... ...chapter length. Not many people have time to hear a whole essay of a chapter. A second problem I have is the repetition of words. For example, his plans for Rome and his wish to make a great empire. I understand his goal for the first time I hear it. However, when you repeat that again and again, when a new technology that he adds in... ...combines with his goals repeating again, it gets tedious and it gets extremely annoying. And for the third issue I have with this novel is the character development. Marcus, the MC, we know how he got there, but we don't see him grow. And the Chief and the other side characters are mostly ignored or forgotten about. So yeah, that's why I gave it this score. Fast storytelling, lack of character development, and way too long chapters, man. If I want to look at an essay, I should just ask my teacher. To give me a example of an essay.

this story has potential, the beginning chapter needs some little more work but all in all a pretty good novel. However I think it's needed to add Kingdom building as well on the tags to make it more specific for that genre.

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thank you for the chapter 😁

that meaning should happen to get out of murder but hey

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