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Interesting concept ruined by too op start. I can forgive the liquour worm, boar gu and spirit stone but the sharingan gu being a permanent effect is too much. If your gonna make a gacha system novel make a list of things and have chat gpt randomnly pick from it to make it unbiased.
Dont see much point in the system. Arcane lore is rife with possiblities to give the mc whatever power u want.
Didnt even recognise the song myself.
Use grammarly instead. Also from a plot standpoint this aint it boss. The guy showed his invetion to a group of ppl on the day blue stole it. How did blue pass it of as his own? And then his daughter does a 180 and fully accepts her father is evil and wants to stop him? The girl who was introduced to us as being sadistic and looking down on weaker ppl?
This has to be AI generated.
This story reads like a bad parody. Nothing makes sense. How did the mc get the loyalty of all the class S members? How did he communicate with them once they became trators? The mcs plan wud have been derailed if just one class S member decided to be an actual traitor cause they were all carrying out different tasks. Why is the match judge helping class A and not getting called up on it once it is revelead?
Energybending is possible.
If you needed a character thats good at mechanics anakin is literally right there.
Meeting with onoki.
The slum woman and her child fulfilled their role. Further attempts to prolong their relevance to the story is unwarranted. They dont need to be plot armoured into Padme's entourage.