GrotesqueIce
Moonlight. Shining. Lilies. Poetry. Kaleidoscope. Mystery. Winter. Temporary. Darkness. Genesis. Anonymous. Hourglass. Memoir. Pain. Dignity. Succession. Anguish. Words. Fingertips. Progression.
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Thank you very much for your feedback. I'll see to it and change it immediately :)
Well written story, I like how the author describes what was happening. And boy, was I shocked. This story has a lot of interesting parts in it though there were a lot of terms I was unfamiliar with, I was grateful for the glossary part. Also, there were many characters, it was kind of hard for me to memorize but I hope it goes well for Mounika. Keep up the good work. I wish you the best.
Yes. It has come to my attention that I need to put spaces for it not to appear text heavy for mobile users. Rest assured that I have formatted future episodes. Previous episodes will be reformatted soon. I apologize fpr the inconvenience. Thank you very much for taking an intererest to my story. I will be sure to incorporate that element in the future.
Thanks for this! Will edit.
All I can say is, Go, Kai, beat them all up! The story is both interesting and well written. I have seen little to no grammar error and I'm sure that this story has a great future. I want to know more about Kai and his further development. I look forward to more exciting episodes. Keep it up and I wish you the best.
The story is well written and my interest is piqued. It was unique of me to see a story which described all of it's characters from the get go so I have no particular like or dislike about it. The premise is nice and the story as I view it is sad and tragic (I like sad stories). From here, I look forward to where the story would go. And I think it's definitely fine if there was no romance in the story as you have said so since they are indeed siblings and a minor (unless..) Anyways, keep up the good work. I wish you all the best.
Maybe you can change the last sentence to: "No one ever wanted a broken little child in their lives... unless they would like to break it more." So it sounds better? Just a suggestion :)
I did not expect this quote to pop up but I have to admit that made me feel good and wholesome.
Well written story, I love the flow and the characters are well described. I can see a great potential in your story and I look forward to your update. The world building is smooth and does not feel like a massive info dump although I was quite taken aback by the flashback scene where multiple unknown characters were mentioned but it was fine since the focus was the two children anyway. Keep it up, I wish you the best in your work.
I am interested as to how you did this format...