VictorRust2410

I mean, considering 90 people agree with me and more than a dozen dropped the fic due to similar reasons, I'd say calling me a liar is stupid but whatever. You do you.

nah no need for that. i dont know about any cause i never check it. i just assumed it was free cause a lot of comments seem to advise that to authors.

yeah your name kinda gave it away lol. but anyway, this is a really great fic for your age, and don't let any haters force you to drop it. as i said, you aren't a bad author, just inexperienced and that'll be easily fixed with time. you can only improve as you continue to write afterall.

Ah, sorry for assuming. there were a few grammatical mistakes though, so maybe a proofreader would be useful. or one of those online sites to check for any mistakes.

A fanfic with a lot of potential but suffering from an inexperienced author. the starting chapters could be a bit boring and immaturish, especially for someone who've already read PJ series. Our MCs presence doesn't change anything much and you might get frustrated by how passive he seems. But the fic really takes off after Kronos's death. The mc starts changing things and differs from canon Poseidon. this is where i felt like i was finally reading about a SI posiedon changing the future instead of history just repeating itself without any changes. it improves a lot as a fic when si starts making waves. In short i like this fic and would be following its progress closely. I would've loved to give it a 4-4.5 but unfortunately that would be a false review. as i said earlier, the author is inexperienced and doesn't seem like a native English speaker and you can see that in the writing. it's still better than most of the crap on this site. Plus he can only improve as he gets experienced. all in all, not a masterpiece by any rights but still a great attempt at writing and a fanfic with a lot of potential and room for improvement. hopefully it won't be dropped.

there are multiple times mc said he has feelings for her and i remember him saying something like "how dare you harm bicky! you shoul die for that!"....i dont remember exactly, it's been over a week i last read but i think it was in bloodbath arc. so yeah, it was incredibly irritating reading through that considering he has future knowledge and can get much powerful and loyal servants than bicky without going out of his way to help them like he did for bicky. it's like authors got a boner for her or something which colours our mcs decisions regarding her. again, extremely irritating.

This was an enjoyable fic for the first twenty five or so chapters. The grammar suddenly improved in the middle of the story which was great and the author said he would be diverging from cannon pretty soon, so i was really looking forward to this. unfortunately, this fic went from promising to boring pretty fast. I was starting to enjoy the fic when Bloodbath arc happened. the mc transformed from cold cannon leylin to an anime hero. he decides to start playing with his opponents and suddenly develops feelings for a character he had only slept with once, and even that non-seriously. if you want the mc to behave like a love-struck fool atleast pick a better character than bicky who is being banged by another guy, for f*cks sake! as for the plot, the less said the better. it's literally a copy of the original without any changes. its fine to follow canon in the start but when a fanfic follows the same plot like original even after 50 chapters? yeah, the dude's delusional to call himself an author. he literally copy pasted entire paragraphs from the original fic, I'm not even exaggerating cause i double checked it. the only reason it's even gaining any readers is due to the fact that it's the only serious wmw fanfic right now. maybe I'm being too harsh and the dude's just writing for his own pleasure then as a serious fic, but it hurts to see so much potential vanish like this.

oh alright, no problem. have a nice day then :)

woah woah there champ, calm your horses would you? I'm not here to argue on a fic i haven't read in a while. as for fairness of my review, i hope you read the whole thing where i complimented the author and all that stuff. those are all my fair thoughts and opinions on this fic without being toxic or writing an angry rant. as I said, i like the writing style and quality, as well as the plot, but didn't like MC's character; extremely compliant and caring towards the canon characters without any context, and extremely passive and submissive towards yoruichi. there's nothing unfair about it. you like caring, heroic and goody MC's? great, it's your tastes. i dont, and that's it. we have our opinions, and we can state them however we want. i didn't add lies or exaggeration in my review, i said it as i saw it.

you're kidding right? name me one single fanfic with an anti hero mc of this quality. not some random bogus edgy sh*t written by a 14 year old virgin while strocking his dick, but a genuinely good fic with a villian or anti hero mc, and writting quality atleast as good as this one. if you could name a few new fics meeting this criteria then I'll be incredibly grateful to u, seriously. those fics are still too rare to be called generic; they are like a gem in the middle of a pile of trash. when i found this fic, i thought it to be one of those gems but the mc turned me off.