yinumlia
yinumlia read, write, tell. this is lia, English is not my first language so please bear with me >,< anyway, my first novel is now out for public viewing so please check it out!
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Really love how the story progresses. Not a big fan of transmigration theme, but this one definitely gave it some spice. The world background is well-designed and easily understood, and characters are uniquely described. It does not rely on the generic elements of transmigration and I commend the author for that.Also, the cover is absolutely captivating!
A great and worthwhile read! I added this to my library and hopes for more. I am no professional writer myself but in comparison to those books written by known authors, I can say this one is almost on the same level as those. The construction of words for narration and dialogues are very creative, making them easy to comprehend and entertaining to read at the same time. Action scenes were executed well through writing too. The world background was built and explained thoroughly, I see no flaw with that so far. I am loving the MC as much as I love her story, her attitude and everything. After all the encounters she had on her new life, her ultimate dream still stands firm on her heart. This novel is great, all about it is, I am looking forward to the progress and development of the plot. Keep it up!
The story is truly touching and quite relatable, being awaken from a fake utopia is my type of plot after all. Although I've seen lots of stories of this theme, this one's unique in its own way. The characters are portrayed to be realistic, as well as their actions but reading it is very entertaining. So, the writing quality is well and decent but I believe there are still room for improvement (purely from a reader's pov, I'm not a professional writer either). I suggest you add more descriptions to the dialogues or describe the current scenario in a more detailed manner, to aid with the reader's visualization. There were some grammatical errors but that's totally fine and does not get in the way of understanding the story (I myself commit that most of the time lmao but too lazy to check them), proof reading is the key, YAS. All in all, the slice of life genre was given justice to and that's a big thumbs up! The story development is good and I am looking forward to how it will progress further. Keep it up!
Such a unique and amazing concept for a plot. Each character's background stories are well-written and you can clearly see their different outlooks in life. The elements of drama, fantasy and comedy combines in a very neat and entertaining manner, a good point to note. There are just some technical errors but they do not get in the way of comprehension. The narration and dialogues are also decently written. Love the characters' and story's development, I highly recommend this one. Will be looking forward to how the story will progressively further. Keep up the good work!
I've read several vampire stories in the past and though some are like formula-based, I still find them interesting and entertaining to read. Same goes with this one, the story is unique in its own way and the distinctions between the characters are clearly shown. There are just some technical errors and confusing parts but catching up with the plot is not that difficult. I expect more from this novel and I have faith the writer will meet those. Best of luck!
Feels dreamy and entertaining. Each characters were described clearly and decently, the narration is also easy the comprehend. The plot is simple yet unique in its own way. I honestly thought it was like an isekai/transmigration story so I was quite surprised to discover it wasn't. Either way is good though, but I think this story is indeed impressive. I suggest you give more depth to the descriptions and remarks to make it more fun to read. Also, you could add more details to the scenes to help the readers imagine the amazing world you have built through writing. Keep it up!
Thank you so much for the review! I myself am aware of those issues but can't find a way to make them simpler. I'll try to take these into consideration as I write the next chapters. However, I am afraid to say that I plan to introduce more characters in the future given that it's kind of an adventure story. I greatly appreciate you giving this novel some time, and apologize for the complexities you have encountered. Anyway, I wish you good luck on your writing journey!
Thank you so much for the honest review and for the paragraph comments as well (also for correcting some errors), i am truly grateful for those. I'll do my best and use your suggestions for the further improvement of my writing because I really find them helpful and true 😅 Good luck on your writing career!
Interesting story, despite having a few parts published for the meantime, you can already see its shimmering potential. Each chapter is loaded with thrill and the writing style is creative indeed. Most importantly, the world background and other supporting details are very unique and clever. I certainly love this and I do have faith in the author's plans for the further development of the story. Keep it up!