Kystal88

Overall a very interesting and good story. I can see where a couple of folks have left comments with suggestions for edits- they looked to be correct, and they'll make the story a little more polished. I enjoyed reading the prologue-type of introduction, and it really set up your story for success in the later chapters, very good use of that writing tactic. The characters' interactions are above average here on WN, and the suspense build up is perfect. Good job, and keep writing, dear author!

Accidentally added a " at the end of this sentence. Please delete when fixed, dear author :)

What I like about the story is that it isn't cookie-cutter powerful MC that knows all, sees all, can do all. It's likable and interesting with the threat of the unknown keeping the character off balance. The storyline is engaging, and I enjoy reading the interactions between the characters so far. If you have the ability, I would recommend finding an editor for your work to give it that extra 'polish' and make it easier to digest. All in all, definitely a good read. Keep it up, dear author!

I believe it was still meant to be Griffin? Please delete when corrected / if I am incorrect, dear author :) :)

thank you!!!! <3

Thank you so much for your kind words, it means a lot!!! :) :) encouragement like yours keeps me going :D

Thank you so much for your kind words!! You made me smile so much :)

Story is very good, an interesting take on the politics of the gods. It makes me think of Diablo, somehow. (compliment!) I read until chapter 6, the action was well-paced, and the world building was spot on, explaining just enough that the reader isn't lost, but not shoving exposition in where it isn't necessary. I enjoyed my time reading this, Dear Author, I am glad that you are able to continue writing successfully!

Hello. I find your work engaging. The premise is interesting, and the MC has a good driving reason 'why'. I enjoyed reading your novel, and read all 7 chapters before I realized it. The action starts right away as well, which is good for grabbing attention, and as always, there is something to fear from an enemy that can't be reasoned or bargained with. Please continue writing, dear author!

This is a very powerful and well written story. There is a certain gravity and weight behind the author's words that I haven't run into very often on online platforms. The characters are multi-dimensional and well written, their interactions feel natural (family to family, peer to peer, senior to junior) It's also very educational in some ways, under the guise of a story. Well done, author!