NessoftheSNES

as a dishwasher trying to stay in university, I can say with confidence that this is the worst plan I've ever heard

one way to start a chapter

it's one of those rare gems where I'm completely drawn in. haven't felt that way since reading paragon of destruction

the best phrase to describe this masterpiece is "horny suspense". The story keeps you wanting for more all the time. King of smutt

take an aspirin bro

For someone so well versed in the Homeric epics, and especially the Odyssey, its weird that she doesn't know about the island of the lotus eaters

Of course, I can't really talk about story development or characters yet, but nevertheless, the first chapter is really well written, and has very colourful descriptions. It establishes stakes by placing the protagonist at his most powerful and establishing conflict between him and the other sovereigns. The only gripes I have with it, is that maybe the vocabulary used isn't always the most accurate, and the lack or misuse of punctuation marks can make it a bit confusing at times, but these are pretty minor imo. Keep up the good work ^^

I don't talk like this ://

Ok, so this is a really well written novel, which is already more than I can say for most novels here. The characters are really compelling, and because of the vibrant descriptions, you can get a very good idea of the world you have been placed in. The only drawback, for me is a bit of bad grammar in the first chapters, but as the novel progresses, it gets fixed. Keep up the good work ^^