HaruHaru24

Hello everyone! I've been working on this story about 5 years now and been improving it time to time, I've publish this story on another platform but it was in my mother language, it's my first time to write a novel in english, honestly, i'm not really confident with my english, and it basically feels like my first time again on writing a story. I hope everyone can leave a critic, suggestion, & some honest review to improve either my grammar or my way to express the character and story. Thank you!

this is honestly relatable ....

what an impressive work, I have not finished all of the chapter but, truthfully the writing was so good, it was clean and easy to understand, the MC is really smart, waiting for his another character development in the future! The concept of the story were good, it's about MMORPG and since I'm currently obsessed with MMORPG as well, the early chapter were so relatable, keep the good work!

The writer did a good work on expressing the character feeling, even the start were so heartbreaking! this story has a big potential, would be better if the writer fix the punctuation of the story! overall it was good!

sometime u need to see someone who are in front of u girl! but you were still blinded by love, it's okay, take ur time girl, and notice how there's a better man in front of you!

now look at this man hehehe

it's okay girl! there's a lot of man out there, it's just you're still blinded by that scumbag!

forget him! he didn't deserve all of your affection!

throw the souvenir away girl! you deserve better than a scumbag like him!

did she kicked him? if she hadn't let me do it!