dayamaryllis

I think you think the characters are the problem, but I think there's way too much dialogue. You as author think it's interesting but as a reader I feel like nothing is happening. These guys are also supposed to be degenerates. Why wouldn't the guy who still had an arm just take everything and leave the maimed one. He literally just met this guy yesterday. The relationship progression is unnatural for someone who left villagers he spent his whole life with to die without much heartache just the day before.

yokai is Japanese so it doesn't make sense to call it this in a "chinese" novel i think.

well I came here from the reddit post about the failed novel. I think you are trying to paint these characters too much. I don't think a guy who you just met would say his mom was a prostitute and etc. It's like they are both trying to host pity parties when they first meet. Its unrealistic to reveal vulnerabilities when you first meet someone who is possibly an enemy.

Hate weak characters and yao chen is weak in this one. He's being used however by the ml and its annoying.

I looked at it a long time. Shi Jian is the shi family head and shi yans grandfather. yang kai is shi yans father(he doesnt have shi name because he married into the shi clan). shi yans mom who was from the shi clan is dead and based on the levels listed earlier for his cousins shi yan who was previously the least talented is now the most talented so everyone except shiyans dad and grandpa is gonna be upset probably because shiyan is gonna start taking all the cultivation resources easily since his grandpa is the family head. I think for a chinese person this kind if family tree is easily understandable. I just dont get why two grandchildren of shijie and two grandchildren of shijian all have names starting with tian. is it to indicate they are children of the first child of the father or something? My family has some thing similar where all the female names on my dads side are 4 letters and end in A. Lana Dana Vela Nona Alma Nora etc. Its something my grandma decided.

he could have just used the vines to run away but he's an idiot

They are underwater so he cant speak. Where is this dialogue comming from?

just terrible. they setup is weak and there isnt a good flow

Ch 450 Many are saying its the same as swallowed star. I dont know whether it is but it has the same start as swallowed star and 40 milleniums of cultivation where the earth is overrun by mutated beasts and they have to fight. The author is too simple. Russia is portrayed terribly. In the early arcs the main enemies other than rich second generations are russians who are basically made out to be super strong and tall with simpler minds like gorillas. indians also are portrayed badly. there is a warrior association run by the eu us and and russia that subjugates china and developing nations which is obviously backward because theres no way russia would be in it but again the author likes russian antagonists. Maybe a russian stole his girlfriend once. EU has a couple bad guys too and there is an anti religious theme as the protag has to overthrow the ordained pope and the entire religion. Africans and Brazilians are ok though.

so dumb to bet a part of your families property when you just started managing it