TianGuez

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no

besides being a forced situation and that they over explain everything, it makes no sense that they have confidence and explain why they are doing with the plan, at most they could ask for explanations about the blind spots without giving the motivations of the owners of the design in their dialogues, just by showing them interested in pointing out the blind spots explains their motivation without it seems that you are trying to explain things as if we were brainless.

I never thought I was going to see such a child's show-like release of information in a ff.

Cats have not yet appeared at this time, for now there were rat breeders, remember that cats were placed after the cheese and blood incident.

Take care, I'm going to give you a review for chapter 25 or 30. I don't like to give quick reviews, for now I really like your work, keep it up. It is worth noting that I would like to see more of the world outside of the simulations (which I guess you are going to do since you put the limitation of the mental condition).

I hope it will not be abandoned* Drugged ? LMAO

Well, I usually do reviews when I get past chapter 20 or a good part of an arc, but I'll do this one in a different way more like telling you the things I liked. Well, Farid is very good as a protagonist so far, you've built him up very well it's quite refreshing that he's a kid and his acting is consistent with the kids in the world of one piece, how he learned with trial and error about the system. Speaking of the system, I don't see it as bad, it would be really bad if the protagonist knew everything about the world and they would let him buy things instead of increasing his basic stats, it's pretty balanced so far. Although we have to see at what level of power he is with just a little accumulation if his 500 stats in both parts only put him at the level of a Luffy at the beginning of the adventure, it would be quite balanced. I know it's not all stats and that there are combat techniques and all, that he'll have to learn during the journey and even who knows how to consume a devil fruit. I have seen that you have not planned so far to make Harem or not, here is a tip from a reader who enjoys the FF; It is easier to write simple romances than Harems, the story loses its north when you try to write several romantic plots in a coherent way, and if you do it carelessly to go quickly to another romantic subplot it will look bad and incoherent. Also you don't necessarily have to make the MC touch a woman in the whole story, we are not in the middle ages where romance is sacred, you can make him have vibes with some girl in the play but nothing dramatic like Twilight. So far it's a pretty refreshing play in concepts and it doesn't seem like the character is going to break right away, although I still don't know the real extent of his power, even the MC doesn't know the real extent of his power, right now he could be a Mini Kaido and he wouldn't know it (In terms of stats). I hope it won't be drugged and that more people will see you, since you are in the ff rank of a month.

Well, I almost never do synopses but this fanfic has earned it. Grammar: It is one of the few times I see a work with a characteristic stamp of the author, you can see a clear style that is maintained during the chapters. Although I have to clarify that I read several chapters with a translator (There's nothing like reading in your native language) 5/5 Updates: I can't say much, but it appears that he has published 33 caps continuously for 15 days, so I will rate this section well, 5/5. Story development: It's great that you have chosen a character that was not reincarnated because it makes you flow with the story and puts a more realistic parameters for the MC to act, not every MC likes to save a person just because it's a character from a series he saw in his past life. About the parameters, you respect them in a great way during the chapters the MC detaches himself from the school characters in a natural way for the reason that he is going to leave. Although I have to point out that some interactions are pretty forced like telling Lydia to act like her real self when she's barely known her for 4 days, taking this conversation specifically but there are quite a few examples between Myr and Lydia's conversations. Character Design: About Myr, I've read quite a few criticisms that pointed him out as the typical weak Nerd that can't do anything, I disagree in a big way with this typecasting of Myr, it is true that he is quite weak physically speaking, but all that hides a brave MC, intelligent and a person with a big heart with his close ones, but a vengeful and spiteful person with the people that hurt him and quite vicious when doing his revenge. Although he is intelligent he is not the typical ff know-it-all, this character learns during the chapters as with Hannah's situation, although yes, he fails a few times when dealing with Jackson, I still think why Myr didn't ruin his life by getting the recordings of the beating, although it is true that it brought him more benefits than disadvantages to use Jackson. 4/5 world design: This FF is based on the TV series Teen wolf, a series that I personally followed until the fifth or sixth season 5 years ago, so I do not remember much of the general context of the series, all that did not prevent me from enjoying the mysterious world of Teen wolf again, the author poses the world of this series as if it were a completely new world and we are raising the necessary information in advance without presuming that all who read the FF know everything about Teen wolf 5/5