Anthony_Marte

Why have the summary in English if the story isn’t in English.

Your reposting this the original is on FanFiction.Net.net called Yami the gamer Kage and it’s already complete.

Your gramatical mistakes are killing me you should slow down and work on that because it distracts from the story.

I tried to enjoy it the premise is okay I supposed but the grammar is killing me and I can’t really get immersed also at the beginning he’s put into the body of a child but he can’t pass a entrance exam at the academy??

This story is decent but it would be so much better if u had decent grammar it severel makes it hard to enjoy with how bad it sometimes get.

Welp he dropped it after posting the last written chapter by the original I kinda knew it was gonna happen cus he was posting too fast the other chapters

1 chap a day is good this the best the 100 fanfic here anyways

Ur fight scene was way too fast paced and u jumped during saying they were going at it for 10 mins u need to take a breath and slow things down a bit so it can be more interesting. If u keep it so fast paced how will important fights go down u feel me. Just a bit of advice maybe watch some fight movies u don’ have to know the names of moves just describe em like I went in swinging from his right with my scythe but he put up a barrier that blocked it. I took a step back a blurred to directly above him and tried a overheard strike but again the barrier blocked me…

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