Upjumped is a word, but I think what they're trying to say is that while "upjumped" is a word and used correctly in the story. It breaks the flow of the sentence, making it weird/awkward to read, and that "upstart" would be a better alternative.

The grammar is so bad. The author keeps using wrong pretense and has so many misspelled words, like they keep using har instead of her, and thats just the beginning. All these little mistakes take away so much from the story.

it's a good start looking forward to the rest of the story.

But honestly, if MC has a real heart to heart with Alison and tells her the whole truth about her family and kate actions. The chances of her forgiving him are high because she was just that nice in the first season. It was her mom's death that changed her personality.

Dude, you are doing GREAT with your writing. Don't forget you can not please everyone, so don't try to. And it's totally understandable why he lost control for a minute there. Like, who hasn't done something impulsive as a teenager, and the thought of wanting to hurt the people that kill your family is completely understandable and reasonable. I'm looking forward to where you take your story.

when are you updating on patre0n

I mean, it's only like a hundred words, so you can't really call it a story. But it's well written.

I tried finding your patre0n but I couldn't it.

It's a good story so far, but if you can write with more details and write longer chapters, it would become a great story.

so is there a chapter today?

Why not make a [pat-reon]? I mean, I don't have a PayPal account, so I never donated to you because I don't want to create a PayPal account just to donate to a single author. But I support several authors on [pat-reon], and I'd be willing to support you on it as well.

Author, you need to work on your use of he/his and she/her. In one paragraph, you are using "he" while talking about Mc. In the next paragraph, you are using she. And it's not just Mc but a lot of characters, and it makes it hard to read and enjoy the story.

So for the patreo,n thing, make sure you make a statement that they are donating to you for appreciation as an author so that you can continue your writing. And that you are NOT SELLING the advanced chapters to your Marvel story or any of your future story those copyrights do not belong to you, and that all characters of marvel and any other characters you use belong to their respective authors. And that you are not writing this story of monetary gain but for only entertainment purposes.

So, are you going to post extra chapters today or create a patreo-n? or are you only going to use cash-ap

I don't have cash app way don't you make a patreo-n?

Do Rose from the guild. You can make it so they meet and interact with each other when he meets the xenos and start working with the guild

Great start. I'm looking forward to seeing where you take the story.

Flash name is Barry Allen. Wally West is the Kid Flash

what's your patre on username

It's a good world building and character building story. over all a great, well written danmachi story.