Sorrias

Smut, and when is he going to visit his past girls?

Your grammar is horrible, holy shit if you don't even know the concept of the word "the" just use grammarly

Bro chill

Bro really said "Looks female enough."

Your chapters make me want to beta read, and rewrite this entire thing, so much wasted potential

Unless he literally said clap this doesn't make sense

Sigh... like, why? Genuinely, why? Why do you INSIST on keeping stating the obvious People. Do. Not. Speak. Like. That.

14 chapters in and we still don't have a single proper interaction between characters, just a random guy entering the city, generic reactions and suddenly they're friends this went from 0 to 100 real quick. Have you ever thought that, I don't know, maybe we'd like to see the history progressing in the slice of live aspect? No? oh silly me why would readers ever enjoy reading a history if not for the human interaction.

You... are a horrible story teller author, I don't mean this offensively but you just jump over everything, we were supposed to see the festival, all we got was a damn description of what was happening, not even 2 pages long. Show us what's happening for fucks sake you're writing this history as if you're dragging your finger through the keyboard.

... He literally just said that