ApoloJackson

Feeling of maturity, and I liked the logic of the city and the blank canvas. Real Madrid is problematic for new players without an established career.

probably the worst chapter in the whole story...

Thanks

I'm so tense, bro, I don't even have anything to say to you. I just wish you good luck, because unfortunately it's not easy for anyone lol

Not even Jesus pleased everyone, man. If that's what you expect when you publish your story, I'm sorry to discourage you - it all depends on whether or not you're willing to separate what's constructive and what's not, but that's up to you, because it doesn't mean it's easy. As for the story, I liked it overall and I liked the romance (although I don't agree with this Blanc, I thought she was too experienced for a new guy - and yes, I know about real life and blah blah, it doesn't mean I like it). But despite that, I didn't say anything because I like how the interactions between them were and the games in general. As for the new romantic interest, I think that if it's going to create drama with the agenda issue, it's better not to include the romance at all (I'm a fan of romance but I've had enough drama in my life). Finally, I don't know if this was helpful or not, they're just my thoughts while I'm on my lunch break. Hugs, author, all the best and see you soon.

Nice man

Thanks for the chapter and thanks for the warning note author, it shows that you are really reading the reviews and care. I will continue following and see what happens, just try to reduce the interference of the other two constantly lol it's like when you like a girl in school and her fat friend never lets you talk.

For the love of God, author, make these two at least talk without being interrupted once. It's gotten to the point where, even though I like romance, I'm skipping these parts. They're not adding anything or moving anything forward, too many interruptions and misunderstandings.

I really like the story. The only complaint I have is the romance and how it's going. It's no longer funny and it's getting frustrating to read about the two of them, especially the constant interruptions. So far, there hasn't even been a single exchange of lines between them without being interrupted or misunderstood, which is already ruining the fun of reading. Otherwise, it's a good romance by the author, I only have these problems in my humble opinion.

Ty