Thank you for your feedback. Actually, there was a time when the few initial chapters were in first person but had to edit it to third. Also, I am working on correcting all those mistakes. I am currently done with editing 5 chapters and will be editing others soon.
I think writing needs a little improvement. However, the storyline is good and the character design is perfect. I suggest you try showing instead of just simply telling the story.
This is a gem! ! It's so good. One chapter and I'm already in. But why is the chapter so long! !🥲. Just not used to long chapters😁. Overall, I love everything about this story. Good going Author! !
Honestly , It is good. I was drawn to the story by merely reading only one chapter. Just beautiful. The writing style is good and the vocabulary is good. The character design is amazing. Overall, yeah it's good and the story has potential. Totally worth reading.
I like how the story is going honestly! Also the pov is giving a very good vibe to the story. Both the lead characters are very well structured. Overall, I like it. ❤️