The concept is good and the author is ambitious. Probably would help to research animals and creatures from time periods at the story progress'. Short chapters so far but saving it in library for updates. Keep it up Author

Title got changed so its called Antithesis

archive of our own for completed book by Oceanbreeze7, same title

It's good. And I dont mean it like some simple oh, it's good. Brothers, I mean, it's Goooood. Like a bit to brutal things to read? Read this. So far, its character development and building experience, currently a focus on WW2

Concept is good, grammar is decent, space bar is a tad wonky

copy and paste work, look up the title name on fan.fict.ion. No credit or disclaimer.

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Grammar is horrid, would suggest an editor or an app to help. Character introduction isn't very creative or original. There's alot of "he did this and then he did that and then he got this". Break it out and go into it. Restart the character introduction by developing his personality traits and try to make sense of why he would do certain actions, instead of "He got really successful by himself really fast because he did this and this and this, then he met his dad and got angry with his mum and kicked his dad". Why would a lonely guy who reincarnates into a fictional world and got the ability to learn at an accelerated rate and became a self made millionaire have issues with his current absent parents?

Evac from end of reach to assassinate..... reasoning to experience live combat with Emile and learn self sacrifice from Jorge.Evac for being the youngest on reach then to meet the master in halo 3. would be interesting to see how he deals working with the crew with the flood

Stolen content from fanfiction. Title is called "will of fire still burns"

Trained personnel don't say clip, they say magazine or mag.

next song from Edan project?

imagine suffocating on your own blood, trying to close the wound, and then seeing some random kid, holding a blade and is vomitting on you..

High chaos, could seen as a potential recruit for Loki or Thanos if the storyline leans in that direction. Or possible recruit to join Hydra... If Hydra is involved with killing his family, possible battle with the winter soldier leading into the civil war storyline. Excuse could be weakening potential shield recruits idk

Finally a author reps my city AUSSIE AUSSIE AUSSIE

What's the upload schedule if there is one?

Am I the only one who wants to know the percentage of the budget that goes towards the cakes?

Hey mate, you back yet?