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ExperimentalWriter

ExperimentalWriter

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Have you ever tried breathing?

2019-03-18 เข้าร่วมแล้วGlobal
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  • ExperimentalWriter
    ExperimentalWriter1yr
    แปะแล้ว

    There are ways to write a phenomenally powerful and insane cosmic god hiding in a random human's body, and make it entertaining. But this isn't one of them. The writing style comes off as very amateurish, so the comedy misses most of the time, and the way characters talk or think reveals a questionable level of reasoning. And that's not mentioning the rather unsatisfying payoffs. I encourage the writer to look at a few better examples for whimsical main characters before continuing! I like the concept behind this and would like to see improvements.

    altalt
    How to Raise Your Regressor
    แฟนตาซี · Anit666
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  • ExperimentalWriter
    ExperimentalWriter1yr
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    There is no evidence of this being a common thing in antiquity. Its not uncommon to have teens and adults (15 and 30), but ancient people arent stupid and know a young person pregnant at that age would die giving birth and probably miscarry.

    "If you really think she's a lively child, then you're naive," Minghe said indifferently. "Plus, she's twelve already, and many influential men have pregnant wives of her age. Are you still going to call her a child?"
    altalt
    Seeking the Dao in the Seemingly Mundane Mortal World
    ตะวันออก · Ji Cha
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