namorai

welcome back ^^

this is a good start on a story that has a twist, and it is fleshed out good enough to hook you in. the combinations of universes that support each-other while being believable and sounds like it could actually happen, is innovating enough to be firm, and follow the lore close enough to balance both the technology and development of the world. the sentences need more structure, commas, and above all, MORE CHAPTERS!

Glemt do mean forgotten. from norway here ^^

is it me or is there words that are not complete? LIVE became L VE...

this process can LEAVE him....

this is an old chapter.

be so kind and continue, i need more,

spread it out over 2 days, one story a day! do not bother about the Schedule, i'd rather have an author with a good and sound mind, and not an author with an scrambled mind.

finish the sentence pls

this need someone to go thru and spellcheck the words, and that the names of people are on the correct character.