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Woah! Thanks for visiting my profile. Although you may see some stories here; I'm not really an author; that title is reserved for people who write novels. I'm more of a writer and voracious reader!
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Asgold, sounds like Assgold. nice overlord reference!
I enjoy mispellings, like soilder. Since instead of being an actual soldier, it's a person make of soil who is a guard / soldier. super fantasy, or soilder is a soldier rank.
In hindsight, I could have immediately had the character kill the animal for meat. But the thought of it didn't occur to me and it seemed a bit cruel. Too much dilemma, drama, debate and group dynamic. Also extremely dark for the second chapter. I'm trying to not introduce too much internal drama and conflict unless it's for the plot.
Nice word count, author knows how to write good scenes and unique characters for the protagonists to interact with. There's a good magic system and family dynamic as you can feel it going in a certain direction. Definitely a slow burn as the world is being built, but can't wait to see the adventures the protagonists go on.
For a first time system novel it's written really well. The system screens are nice and easy to read. It's not a dark themed novel and very similar to various litrpg stories. I think the humor is great and the first 20 chapters definitely have some interesting moments and characters. World building-wise it's still a bit slow. However the pacing is not hurried so you get to take the time to understand the leveling system and information about the enemies before each fight. The title is a pretty good synopsis of the story and it's a very leisurely read.
For the first two chapters, I'm quite looking forward to the story. I can see that the author has a good sense of character description and the mystery behind the MC's background intrigues me. It definitely has the setting of a webnovel story that I'd read. However, I'd have to mention it's going to take a few more chapters to really get a feel for where this story is going. It's a strong start for a fanfiction and I'm looking forward to what adventures Kai Stormborn will face. I'd prefer not to give any rating for stability of updates & world background at the moment, so the rating is a little lower than I'd usually give. Thanks for the story droopyauthor!
apologies, my writing skills are quite lacking in telling the story I want to tell. I hope you were able to make it through the chapters ok.