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So far in the story, there is only one female lead character which is Terumi Mei.
Give up what?
The repetition of losses mother, grandmother, friends, clansmen reflects Uchiha Izumi’s overwhelming grief and desperation, which are crucial to her character. Trimming this would strip away the emotional depth and build-up needed to convey her resolve for revenge. In Japanese and Chinese storytelling, repetition is often used to convey emotional weight and intensity. Instead of aiming for brevity, characters may repeat certain words or phrases to emphasize how deeply they feel or how significant an event is. This style reflects the idea that strong emotions like grief, anger, or determination aren’t easily summed up in a few words. For example, when Uchiha Izumi lists all the people they’ve lost, the repetition serves to show her overwhelming pain and how each loss compounds the others. It also mirrors real-life emotional outbursts, where people might express themselves in a repetitive way because their emotions are too intense for neatly structured speech. While some readers prefer concise dialogue, not every scene should prioritize brevity, especially those dealing with trauma.
While it's true that Akira Toriyama mentioned S-cells in an interview as a requirement for the Super Saiyan transformation, it doesn't contradict the role of emotions. Emotions, particularly intense anger, are the trigger for activating the S-cells, which allow the transformation. Saiyans need a sufficient number of S-cells to transform, but emotional intensity plays a critical role in activating them. Moreover, most documented transformations in the series, including Goku and Vegeta’s, occur in response to extreme emotional states, reinforcing the traditional narrative that emotions are crucial.
Imagine being so irrelevant that your idea of a "protest" is whining in someone else’s book review section like a bored 12-year-old who just discovered the internet. You spent two whole minutes writing something that took zero brainpower? That’s painfully obvious because your comment couldn’t have been more useless if you’d written it on a sticky note and stuck it to your forehead. A “protest” is supposed to actually achieve something. All you did was flex your inability to form a coherent thought. If half-assed trolling is your way of getting attention, you might want to consider a new hobby, because this one is tragic.
I've reviewed your work and rated it fairly. Enjoy!
Just when I think I’ve hit the lowest depths of fanfic trash, another vile monstrosity crawls out from the sludge to prove me wrong. These writers must have IQs so low they’re not even measurable by human standards—how else could they create something this appalling? It's like they mash their faces into the keyboard, hoping sheer randomness will form a coherent story. Spoiler: it doesn't. Are they deliberately writing this garbage, or is it just the byproduct of their brain cells struggling to function? Honestly, even a brainless, rotting corpse could crank out better stories than these atrocities. Reading this drivel is like enduring an assault on my intelligence, leaving me wondering if their only goal was to see how far they could set the bar below absolute zero. The only thing worse than their writing is the fact they have the audacity to share it with the world.
PM me, if you want to know.
The original raw story is still incomplete, and I’m unsure if Granola will be included in it.
Done, thanks!