Khoalakuma
การเขียน
ของการอ่าน
2320
อ่านหนังสือ
no
At least the story was interesting. Thank you for your hard work in writing this story and hope you can consider continuing the story or a rewrite someday.
I think you have a good concept for a story it just your writing seem like a summary with narration to me. I hope you can fix this issue.