Twilight: Son of Hades

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The people giving this high reviews must read a ton of MTL because to me this is unreadable. There are constant issues with tenses, mistranslations, and cultural nonsense. When I mean cultural nonsense I mean the MC panicking about how not answering one math question the teacher asks him right might somehow “ruin” his reputation. Anyway, between the poor grammar and weird Chinese style cultural nonsense I cannot suggest this novel. I would rate it at most a 3.7/10 which is unfortunate because maybe if it were readable it would be a good story.

The grammar is not perfect but it is readable. The development of the story is not going very well, the fact that the MC does not have the memories of the body is a little disturbing because the ex body owner was a genius, i really hope the muscle memory stayed otherwise it will become du grand n'importe quoi.I am a son of Hades, le fils d'un des Big tree, even if it happened at the moment he took over the body, he should have been stronger, Physically, this means that he woke up too soon after his transmigration, he would have had to stay sick in the struggle, the time that his body adapts to these powers of demi God, he agreed to call the mother of the corps "mom" too quickly , it's like he rejected all his past without thinking and is already close to school and everything,It's not realistic enough. The author should really look up the powers of Hades and see the technical data sheets of the demigod son of Hades in Percy Jackson , The MC should have been more OP. The development of the relationship with Alice is extremely forced ,Alice is too OCC inside, it's not our lovely Alice , The MC is not yet stable enough in this new life to notice Alice, He doesn't even know what his birthday is, that of his mother, In short, his identity is precarious at this moment. In short, I hope I didn't insult the author with my remarks, I just wanted to help with the huge holes in the plot.

I currently made it 15 chapters in and I have been enjoying the novel at the moment but, the background is very slim. Also, I didn't mind at the beginning of the novel where the author calls the MC a he and vice versa towards the female characters. I assumed it's a mistake and will get fixed later on in the novel. But, the grammar just gets worse. Besides that, the story is pretty good and has some potential but it has to be fixed very badly. If it's fixed I will rate it higher probably.

Story wise it's good and I love how author points out every time how creepy Edward and Bella are being in public. Only issue I have is that Mc seems a bit too weak and I mean not just weak when compared to vamps but even when compared to normal humans and the power he is controlling as of chapter 11 just seems more like a gimmick than anything can you tell author by which chapter he becomes stronger as you have put overpowered tag but mc is not even normal human strong? I think weak to strong would be better tag as I don't see him being overpowered anytime soon when he can't even fight with bunch of normal humans now.

It’s super slow it’s super cliche it’s super basic. There are so many parts that are so hard to read I just skip through them. The mom is such a horrible character it’s absurd. Read if you want it’s not horrible I just mentioned the bad factors

IT's good so far. Is this going to be Polygyny relationship. I don't mind it will be interesting. mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

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It’s good but the author really needs to improve his grammar or it’s going to be unbearable

Keep writing! It's really interesting and engaging, but it's different from conventional twilight fan fiction, so read it with an open mind. I'm really enjoying it.

I really wanted him to be with Jessica it would’ve been great if he went with both but it was good overall I just can’ read no more knowing Jessica not a Love interest

I like that there is development of both the character and the world. I took a break because I was a little bored, but it turned out that I simply did not read up to the most interesting part, the development of forces. Now it's really interesting to read.

the story is ok good but that's it thanks for the story

I won't deny that I was a little irritated by the MC's love interest at first, but the story had me hooked enough to rethink that. I'm starting to like where this is going.

interesting.... there are some errors but keep it up..

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in short I read 16 chapters, in short it's ambiguous, frustrating and not at all like the tags present it the mc is stupid, weak and has a kind of complex that I can't put my finger on. in short the synopsis is great the first 5 chapters too then, nothing.

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