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Great writing quality all around, really impressed with this one! Line length, use of vocabulary, everything is just off the charts - you should be really proud. The story is very interesting, some more chapters though please!

Hello readers! This book has been revamped by me a few times now to make it as great as possible. So I'll be publishing all my final drafts for Arc 1 which should add up to around 40 chapters or more. The book has a total of 4 Arcs btw so don't worry. It won't end at 40 chapters. Also, though the book has a few other reviews, I think it's important for me to note that any review that isn't from November 2021 is probably outdated due to me rearranging the storyline and fixing grammatical issues. Please let me know what you think of the story thus far!

Woah, this story is so creative. The concept of the Mind World versus the Real World is so mind-blowing. Love their comradery, and their teasing of one another. I am falling in love with the MCs Sindy, Andrew, Nathan already. But I have this sinking feeling that something's going to happen between the 3 of them...something bad ): Since the title is focused on Nathan, it makes me think something will tear them apart. Either that or they will be stronger together like Harry Potter. Fans of HP, should definitely check this out. The magic, mystical vibes are on point. I'm enjoying the story so far even though I've only read until the fourth chapter. The writing is creamy smooth :) and it's easy to comprehend and keep wanting to read onwards. I recommend this book to fantasy readers looking for a new world to submerge their hearts and eyes into! Keep it up author, you should be really proud of yourself and your work!

Dear Author, I agree with my previous speaker. You're doing great job! Nicely written, pleasure to read! Great cover page. All the best! **. We have to find a way to help you a little...

My first thought was not my typical kind of novel, then I scroll to the first chapter still thought it wasn't my cup of tea even though I found some parts funny. And It's well written, like bro, well written!! Until it reaches a part about dark clouds, I was like oooouu it's about to get hella interesting, and damn I was right. Hello there, yes you if you're reading the reviews before reading, you won't be dissatisfied. Well done author 👏👏👏👍

the first chapter alone sounded like an apocalypse movie and I love apocalype movie!! 😍 it was even well described that i could picture every scene. a plus for me is the fact that despite being a fantasy, it's still realistic especially his relationship with his family and his friends, of his reactions and all. keep it up author!!🤩

The synopsis itself screams adventureeee! The mc is like midoriya from mha but not really 🤣 The transition is great, the characters are likeable and it is well written! Good luck on finishing your book!

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After reading a few chapters, my first impression - uou don't struggle, like most of us (no english speakers), with tenses, style or grammar. This is your advantage over most of the authors on Webnovel. You use it for the perfect! Your story has everything a good novel should has (interesting storyline, expressive charcters, etc.) I can confidently say that you know how to write. You're doing a great job!

I am a new reader of this novel so I saw the synopsis and read some reviews here. Then i gave it a try. Its really good with the world building and character formation. A lot of words in a chapter too. I enjoyed it very much. But I want more action and maybe you can add some comedy here here.

it's great, the story, the world building. Its a very well written story, so far so good, love the characters and the pacing of the story. A job well done.

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i saw an error tho, for the second one you already know, story development seems natural, characters are real, world is something i've never seen before at least, no visible loopholes

Interesting start. I really enjoyed reading it. It felt like i was watching a apocalypse movie because i could see the surroundings in my head. So far i am loving Nathan's character. I would love to keep reading. Great job.

Very well done. This story is legit and well-rounded. The description is good, the chapters have a good length, the story development is great, the characters are realistic, and the world background is legit. This story is going places I can tell, you've got yourself a new fan. If you don't mind, I also appreciate if you checked out my story "Avatar: Macai's Journey". Cheers

Ok first of all the story development is quite good. Unlike me, your mistakes are minimal and your use of vocabulary is like a professional assassin wielding a blade, it's excellent. I just started reading a week ago so I'm not sure but so far your updates have been quite slow, but being a writer is not easy so it's understandable. The characters are good. All in all, it's good!

I enjoyed reading the chapters indeed , this is great keep it up. I love your work hoping to see more updates soon .The characters are amazing everything is fine for me in this book.

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Yes! I'm giving 5 stars! Honestly, this story feels... relaxing? I know it's weird but that's what I felt. Surely because the writing was neat and had low grammar mistakes. A big applause author👏🏻✨