Fate Love Game

Author shameless review here. This is my first time writing a novel, like as in my first time ever in my whole life. Only tried writing since I've got the free time to use. I'm not a native English speaker. That's why pointing any grammar mistake and explaining it to me would be a huge help for me. My grammar probably sucks and my vocabulary is very limited, but I'm willing to learn.

Ok, so I've caught up with the latest chapter (66), and all I can say about this book so far is that it's really good. Ok let's start from the top. Writing Quality: I think that the writing quality is really good. The author knows how to build suspense, knows how to write fluff, knows how to make the humans, feel... human? which is a very significant thing. And the author claims that they're not a native English speaker, but... the grammar and writing quality is as good as a native English speaker so don't let that deter you. Stability of Updates: 1 chapter per day, feels short probably because I really like this book, but I mean, you can read ahead (10 chaps), but still, 1 chap a day already happy with that, at least not one per week. Story Development: In terms of story development, think it's a tad bit slow, don't really mind though because at least it's entertaining and builds suspense. Lots of suspense. Can't wait to see the puzzle pieces come into place. And also the girls are really cute. That's a plus too. :D Character Design: Already said, they feel like actual humans, that do human things, sometimes irrational and sometimes rational, emotional, etc. Sooo, already more than I could ask for from a book. World Background: Finally, world background. It's pretty well-developed considering it's only 66 chapters in, and I think there's a lot of room for it to expand. Conclusion: Give the book a try, I think you might enjoy it :D

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To be honest I really wanted to enjoy this story, but it's really bad. Every dialogue between characters feels so fake, unreal, not human. Characters themselves are cliche, boring and dumb. Naoki - A girl to blush everytime MC talks. MC - I dunno, "mysterious guy" with some trauma and skills, but pretty cliche and really dumb. Nothing new. For a story rated 4.98/5, it's seriously BAD, I've never read anything worse than this story, I don't know how the rating is this high, MAYBE someone deleted few reviews or something, not that I'm trying to suggest anything here.

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I want to kidnap the author and lock him in a dungeon making him my eternal slave so that he will keep on writing for me. .............

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The novel is good . I see lot of potential in it . ....... . ....

This is what I would consider a diamond in the rough. It has the potential, if executed correctly, to be an extremely GOOOOOOOOOD story. The writing quality, while a little scuffed in the earlier chapters, definitely improves later on, and as confirmed by the author, this is their first novel, so it's only natural. Second, stability of updates. The author tries to update once a day, but there is usually 3-5 chapters a week (at the time of this review :P), so not bad at all, but you know, a chapter a day keeps the depression away ;). When it comes to story development, I would rate it a 4, since it is moving along somewhat slowly, but the romance is developing so I don't mind. In addition, the foreshadowing of certain things are very good (wink wink). In terms of character design, there are definitely a few "2D" characters, but the main cast mainly feel like actual humans capable of making both rational and irrational decisions in the heat of the moment. When it comes to world background, we don't know much about it, but I'll give it a five anyway :D! Anyway, keep it up author!

How this novel can suck so bad is only a mystery. All characters are handicapped and the plot is nonexistent, trying to be interesting is nonexistent

Honestly Enjoyed this story. Author if u Read this i have a Opinion on adding more Intelecutal sides of all characters, gives more insight of what type of person they’ll movefoward Into.

Amazing

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Keep up the good work, author.

You have a good story and I think you've displayed you're vision in it atleast from what I read. The characters are alive and not hollow like most characters from this website. And lastly my main point......Yandere.

Review till ch-50. The story is likeable and MC is shrouded in mystery. The girls are good though, they show quite an affection to MC. That's all.

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