Fairy Tail: Sun Eater

This is good💕💕💕 I just hope it's not Harem because i hate it...🔪🔪🔪👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

To start off, I was honestly really looking forward to reading a dragon slayer fanfiction. That being said this story was not what I expected, the grammar is mostly sub-par but the author's first language isn't english so it's fine. Though the stories quality is what is heavily lacking in my opinion, there are a lot of plot holes, and the story feels as if you are writing it in a rush and have not taken your time to plan things out. In your newest chapter you said that even the previous dragon kings bowed to the dragon that taught the mc. From what we have seen in Fairy Tail this is far from the case as most dragons have shown to be incredibly prideful, especially Acnologia who views everyone else as ants. Overall the story feels like it lacks planning and is not thought out, and isn't what someone would ideally want from a story.

why even bother with reincarnation if you delete the mc memories may as well make an OC, sun slayer but cant be like superman or escamor getting stronger with sunlight. could go on but i already dropped it at chapter 1

oddly I feel the need to mention my thoughts. 1)my rating is lower than I wanted but I rated it how I view it just I value some things over others 2)my main frustration is the fact that fairy tail is a very unique and magical world with its own lore and ideas. this story introduces sun dragon slayer as a possibility, but instead of expanding on this magic, something that is grabbing people's attention even from the title, it is greatly lacking. I wouldn't be upset if this was replaced with some great world building (which is hard in a already set world) or interesting character development. BUT instead we throw the mc at roubal an interesting character which is promising. but it is obvious that it is solely to allow the mc to learn from him. which isn't in itself a problem but leads into the related number three which really gets me and I even commented 2 times about it. 3) we throw away the interesting anything for the development of cars which you know what each their own, seems like a absolute waste of time and space in a book but whatever. exploring I hopefully gonna relate to that car and explain every thing instead of the author just flexing car knowledge and throwing their interest at the book. then the travesty of a magical world exploring your own created magical creativity you introduce him to building guns? why just why guns? they remove magic from any occasion and in a book about another interesting thing it makes it so hard to pay attention. we have no anything substantial other than the mc developing the world towards our own, at least for me I am reading this for fairy tail Earth land not earth. 4) so this doesn't feel like an absolute just bashing of the author I would like to say a few things at the end. the idea is superb, and it is really difficult to build a character in a world with set rules that you have to build around. I assume that is why the variations on guns and vehicles to fill creative gaps, hopefully not to just flex knowledge. furthermore it does seem like some planning and thought did go into it (even if in my opinion not down the correct path). the writing I didn't mention because everone else did but it is very rough and a little awkward but does seem to translate the meaning and wouldnt be as hard to translate. pacing and opness is controlled and well done ignoring the gaps made to introduce above stuff. all in all I am going to make the assumption that the more you add the more it will even out and show the highlights as the beginning is usually the biggest struggle. good luck author.

Зачем стирать воспоминания это блять бред🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮

disappointed for a story to be ranked so high and be so average. I'm going back to reading fairy tail: Annihilation King ---‐------------------

honestly reading the first few chapters it's a good idea and I like the theory behind it but you need to get someone to revise this. it's written.... weird keep it up tho definitely gonna stay watching for more chapters

I didn't like it, I'm sorry. 😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😘😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏😎😎😎😎😎😎😎🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😘😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😘😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏😎😎😎😎😎😎😎🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😘😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏😎😎😎😎😎😎😎🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏😎😎😎😎😎😎😎🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏

just a couple Grammer mistakes but that's fine you can just use something like grammarly on the Google store to fix that problem. Keep up the good work.

At first I thought that it was american elite troopers bashing story, i mean make super dumb MC and call him elite soldier... But then I got a feeling that author is a kid or writing for children, don't recomend this for anybody above 12 y. o..

I think the car should rewrite the story, the central idea is good but there are some ollos in the trala that bother most readers. But I think if he fixes it, it's going to be a good novel. As for the magic, try not to add more. It will become very heavy if you add more aces and more.

honestly reading the first few chapters it's a good idea and I like the theory behind it but you need to get someone to revise this. it's written.... weird keep it up tho definitely gonna stay watching for more chapters

Absolute trash Garbage grammar Garbage characters Garbage system design Garbage everything bruh Garbage dialogue Garbage world building Garbage grammar again

The story is good and progressing well but the Writing quality is quite poor. Tu would make great fanfic if the grammar was proper. Wrong grammar simply takes away the pleasure of reading since I keep correcting sentences in my mind after reading them.

hey, he can also use helium, hydrogen, different radiations as UV rays and infra-red, can use light to make someone blind, change vision color, control color lengths, make illusions, and some other cool stuff, oh he can also affect positive and negative electric and magnetic fields as well try to use them as well.

Just was too slow paced for me but good story overall.

The author's writing is vile. His writing style is one of the worst I've ever seen. This FanFiction was killed by the author's writing style. The updates are completely random by the way. And the protagonist gives the vibes of a Chinese protagonist who shows up all the time.

Reveal spoiler

Fix your grammar, please for the love of all that is holy fix your grammar. Download grammerly, edit your previous chapters, and fix your grammar.

Being the sun dragon slayer just sound completely OP.Being the sun dragon slayer just sound completely OP.Being the sun dragon slayer just sound completely OP.