Destiny: Hive Rising

well, I'll change this as the story goes on, but for now. it's an interesting story, as there isn't a lot of hive-based stories, and most of them are dropped or forgotten.

This seems promising. Not many books about destiny follow through, plus this one’s about hive, you don’t see those very often

its awsome so far, i just cant wait for more

Awesome to see a story set in destiny that actuallys pull off a different point of view. I can ’t wait to see more!

sry about review im new and i love hive destiny fanfic plz keep writing .lol its great

Just a great read and my fist ever 5 stars!!

It’s a very promising story if I don’t say so myself.

A review from myself. Im aware that the writing quality isn't the greatest, however Ill try to make up for that with an intresting/semi interesting plot. If you have any suggestions, leave them in the replies to this review!

Full disclosure; this piece of writing was sent into a discord group, asking for feedback. I do not indulge in Destiny as a franchise, so I cannot comment there. The chapters have an issue with switching between present and past tense; "Those are all that are on my mind right now... Several small worms scavenged along the ground" from chapter one, or "After I selected my upgrade, my vision returned.... Fully waking up, I hear a battle cry" in chapter 2. Thankfully this is something that happens less as the chapters go on, but its something that should have probably been fixed in the second draft. The writing also switches between first and third person, and even narration styles between paragraphs, which make it hard to read. There are some grammatical mistakes that should also be addressed, and should have been edited out before posting. My native language is not English, but they stood out to me quite heavily and continue to be an issue with the recent chapters. Second drafts or maybe a beta-reader would be handy for this. The vast majority of the story happens within our protagonists head. This is something that can be done to quite the effect. This kind of approach can give a much more intimate relation between reader and the protagonist. It may be the case of a very young authors voice, but we do not get this kind of experience here. There are small hints at personality here, that could be developed into something further, but are instead simply used to move from one point to another. Eight chapters in, and we know very little of substance about our protagonist. Their thoughts seem to be purely logical, with little to no internal monologue that doesn't push the narrative. This may be by design, but it definitely feels alienating. If I were to die and wake up in a monstrous otherworldly body, I would expect to have some serious questions, more worried, panicked thoughts. The protagonist approaches their entire situation with... a very calm, almost bored demeanour. This brings to the last point, which is that the prose is very monotone. Whilst a lot of the writing is used to overexplain the situation time after time, the character getting shot at is described in the same way one would describe making breakfast.

This is an honest review, I tried to limit my bias as much as possible. In my opinion, it's rough around the edges in the beginning but it improves rapidly. It fits into the style of book that I really enjoy so I hope it doesn't get dropped.

great story! Love the mc, and his power is a super interesting way to represent hive “sword logic”

Interesting concept, really hope you continue this destiny fic. Good luck fam [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

There isn't much of a plot to speak of right now. The dialogue is very bare bones, and offers very little in terms of character development or even characterisation. The prose is simple, and reads fluidly enough but doesn't really hold attention very well. The chapters are very short, and you could cut most of them and still have the same things happen. It could use some more actual description, and maybe more interaction with the outside world. Right now it just reads like disjointed diary entries. If I wasn't told this was set in the destiny setting, very little would have pointed to it.

love it more chapters please ill drop some stones

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Would fully five star it but the fic is in its infancy however I pray to the traveler that this does not get dropped and it keeps getting updated because finding a good destiny fic is very hard to do so please keep updating

Cant wait for more it is so good to see from a kinda Realistic point of a Hive Thral will be interesting once he becomes an Akolyth

Forgot to make a review lol. The rarity itself would bump this ff up to a full 5-star, but that would be kinda fake. The thought of finding a way to use guns of Fallen of Human makings is kind of dumb because the Hive gets their version of guns later on, but because the MC does not know about the Destinyverse (I think it should be called Bungieverse?) makes it logical that he is comfortable with human guns. The writing is fine. The story goes at a comfortable pace for me. Updates have stopped for some time, don't remember why.

It's a good story so far. MC kills, gets biomass and evolves. As of ch11 mc has been alone and just got contact with hive. Good grammar and MC is fun to go along with. Nothing revolutionary but neverthless enjoyable story. I hope it won't be dropped.

I really liked this story and I feel like it had a lot of potential I can only hope that one day the author decides to continue this story.