BonEs, FlamEs and IcE (DROPPED VERSION)

Another work from Jujumaster. This writing in this one is miles better than the other novels that he has written. Conventionally, the MC of the novel is introduced first. Stories of side characters aren't given much shine. Although it is still early to speak, BONES FLAMES AND ICE seems to indulge in making side characters memorable and not a one-off object. Still some glitches in writing, I think twice within the five chapters but you won't notice AT all because of how indulging the story is. Juju pls make the MC a dragon

Writing a review after the first chapter. To me, the first half of it was nothing but a big info dump. A history lesson. In the first chapter you need to focus on the most important stuff: The main character. their foundation, their will, their ambition, their drive, what they want, why they want it, who they are. That's what matters since that is why the readers are most likely reading your story. Instead we got a ton of history I fo about the warring nations, when none of that was really nessecary. if we started at the end with those soldiers and the mage, then everything could slowly be revealed throughout the story, not just dumped onto you at the start. still, the ending was good so I liked it overall.

The author of this book is on the path of greatness with this story. I just need to update always, give a little more details, and don't forget to double-check for any mistakes.

It's still too early to tell but the book has some promise. I would like for the author to create an auxiliary chapter for the timelines because I got lost a bit in the first chapter, trying to keep a sense of what happened when without getting lost in the weeds. And work on your transitions from scene to scene..Nice use of vocabularies and all the best. Some minor issues here and there disappear with time. All the best