I Wanna be an Eevee Master

Hey there! Your story honestly felt like watching an emotional short film, every scene was so vivid and full of feeling. I love adapting stories into comics, and I’d be thrilled to talk about it if you ever wanted to explore that. Discord: (minakn0ws) Mina

Interesting premise and handled rather well. That said you could use an editor or a beta reader because sections of the story read like it was feed to google translate. Keep writing, while there are still grammatical errors your pacing and world building have improved as the story goes on.