limited third person narration

Enjoyable read, narration decent. I don’t usually like First person narrative and prefer Third person. The update is a bit unstable, don’t know when will happen.

honestly the writing quality is so bad that his first person narration looks like third person even five years old kids can form.more coherent words than this abomination.

Pretty good plot in a already existing background, however the translation could improve and I personally dislike the use of third person narration that, sometimes, is used.

Well, the first chapter failed my litmus test. The author broke the fourth wall for no other reason. In the first paragraph. The narration seemed like it started as third person limited observer till the author self inserted himself for a quick jab that was cheap at best. Ho Boye! Maybe it seemed like a good idea in his head? Ok, so third person limited narration style is a good way to write the world from the focused person's perspective without being restricted too much, like a first person narrative. Problem is, the narration sometimes changes to first person, sometimes to third person omniscient with no apparent reason and it's lack of consistency make for a really annoying read. Even taking the TPL narration into consideration, the info dump ruins it. The author would provide information in forms of the focused characters thoughts and the interactions to other characters. So when he dumps a ton of 'humorously toned' info, the character turns into a delivery tool and fails to connect as a real and believable human. For example, why would the character start thinking about the prisoners in detailed biography and react to it when he already clearly knew the information for awhile? It reads as if the character knew someone would be reading his thoughts and he started thinking all the info dumping points. There are other problems too. The dialogues are written very poorly, like a child's stage drama. Just try and imagine those lines being traded in real world and you'll cringe. There are useless descriptions of stuff I know won't ever come into play nor flush out the scene nor build the world just for the sake of having more words. Poorly written characters, poor structural edits on the paragraphs, poor narration consistency, poor interactions, poor attempts at humor; the R16 tag for nudity and gore might only be for quick attention and I'm sure those will be handled poorly as well. If the same author wrote all the other chapters, the 'political intrigue' will at best be kids playing a board game.

This story is lit! I am very happy to have come across this novel. I indulge in its fluency and nice narration. With a third-person narration that was epic and a good choice for picking it. I have found a hidden gem within the sand and can't wait for it to reach a million views! Loved it! ❤️