one eyed owl

this is one of the best owl house fanfic

Wow . . . . . I am so excited for more!! Damn first fanfic to point out how harsh is a goul's hunger, but a question is beg to be asked which is, What will be his Kagune? I wish it could be Eto's One Eyed Owl, add he should increase his regeneration to reach the level of Noro (he was almost like a freaking Immortal!!) Slowly develop to their level, I am not asking for him to have them from the start ofc; since it will only ruin the suspense like you said.

I like the plot; I’ve reached chapter 16. The main problem is that the connection between chapters doesn’t make sense. At one point, the character has a wand that looks like a cane and leaves Ollivander’s shop, but later they’re back at Ollivander’s getting a new cane. Another example is when they get an owl: first, they convince the owl to become their pet, and later they buy the same owl again.

the inconsistencies are Pileing up already, things change between chapters and it's getting annoying, he had a tawny owl one chapter then the next he had a snowy owl, please go through these and check then with someone who understands the base material and then work from that to adapt it to this story.

1. The main character's knowledge is inconsistent, sometimes he knows everything but sometimes he doesn't know something he should know. 2. Calling other characters by their full names makes the language feel very stiff, for example: "Touka" becomes "Kirishima Touka." 3. Adding something unnecessary, for example: secret laboratory room in ward 24, black-skinned eyeless ghouls, ancient ghouls who can't use kagune. 4. Calling the "One-eyed Owl" "Eto Yoshimura" is important to note that Eto Yoshimura's identity or name is only known to the Aogiri Tree's top brass like Tatara.