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Too many Chinese Sayings and References, it bugs the crap out of me.

The only thing that needs to be improved is the writing the dialogue feels weird and the flow of the writing is not very immersive maybe try to use A.i to improve the flow and dialogue also make sure to get rid of any Chinese elements such as the sayings and jokes between him and the clan leaders son

its a fun dxd novel with fun abilities there is only one thing that ABSOLUTELY ruins this. the way the mc talks. everyone talks normally and he constantly talks in shitty slang and sayings. he tries to "aura farm" and its just cringe. some ex sayings, no cap no kizzy, ma brutha, no homo, its just constant cursing and incomplete sentences only when he talks I guess its suppose to make it to give him a unique humorous character but it just doesn't work and doesn't fit in the narrative and in the normal conversations

the underlying logic for the economy doesnt make any sense. In additioneverything is explained away with chinese sayings instead of actual logic.

great start but goes downhill with cliche chinese tropes and sayings that doesn't fit the story and with prapaganda hidden in some paragraphs.