zabuza x kakashi

Garbage translation, inconsistent plot with sections of chapters missing, and completely braindead plot, like kakashi using mangekyo against zabuza

i added this story on a whim and it did not shine initially, but this has won me over with its consistency, both in update frequency and story consistency, never doing anything over the top, where other mcs would have done over the propotionate zabuza vs kakashi, overblowing zabuza blessinsing, you kept it a question mark, neither making it overpowered faceslapping nor too weak to be questioned, this story has the potential to shine,

This book seemed great at first, up until chapter 12 everything seemed to be going well, but the cracks started to show in Chapter 9. The protagonist and his team get assigned the Zabuza mission to land of Waves. Not awful, its a bit played out, but its not a huge issue. It is a bad sign though, a sign that we are going to be clinging to canon and never letting go. Then we get the Zabuza fight, which, not great. He is keeping up with Zabuza. Just a few chapters prior he couldn't even handle Kurenai in a fight, who is easily weaker than Zabuza. Kurenai at no point seemed to be overly pressured and was still mostly toying with him. But now he is able to cut Zabuza, chip his blade, and put real pressure on him. Haku eventually steps in and paralyzes Zabuza... Which, WHY? In canon, Haku stepped in when Zabuza looked like he would get killed and Kakashi was too tired with Chakra exhaustion to do anything or think hard about it. Here, Zabuza is barely wounded or pressured. He only used Hidden Mist jutsu and water clones that I can remember, and generally didn't really do too much that would tire him out like a Water Dragon Jutsu. There was no sign he was badly hurt enough that he'd step out so soon. He barely got cut even. Haku turns Zabuza into a pin cushion and tries to drag him away, the protagonist calls it out as an act, and they let the two leave anyway. Then ZABUZA, who should be unconsious from the needles and in a state of FALSE DEATH, speaks up and says: "No, actually I want to fight a bit more now." and tries to fight the protagonist in a 1 on 1 fight, while crippled with needles and barely able to stand, trying to do that same shit he did while dying in the canon timeline, but before they even get to meet Gato or go to the Wave village. He is effectively killing himself for no reason and trying to do a 1 vs 1 suicide fight. And Kuranai LETS the protagonist do it without stepping in. Zabuza has no reason to do this. He is in the worst state he could possibly be in for a fight now, with his body now in a state of near death induced by Haku, and he is trying to force a fight right now instead of leaving to heal up and then come back. Zabuza is a ninja, more than a ninja, he is a master of the Silent Killing technique and Hidden Mist Jutsu. He is not a front-line fighter despite what you may assume. He is an ambush hunter and silent predator. He is not the kind of person to recklessly rush in and throw his life away. He did that in Canon because Haku just died protecting him, Kakashi was ready to finish the job to Zabuza himself, he realized Gato betrayed him, and Gato treated Haku's corpse like shit. Zabuza didn't just go out like that because he does it on a whim, or because he will just do that at any chance he gets to kill himself, he did it because there was no way out of this for him. He did it because Kakashi would have killed him anyway after Gato was dead, Gato was treating Haku like garbage, Naruto gave a big dumb hero speech, and he was probably going to die anyway to bloodloss, so Zabuza decided to go out in a blaze of glory. This book treats his meaningful suicide as something he will just DO for no reason other than he wants to fight the protagonist. The entire Wave arc feels so sloppy and rushed, that even with how promising the entire book up to this point felt, I can't read any more. It is genuinely sad that such a promising concept was treated so poorly this early into it. The writing up to chapter 9 was great, but past that point it feels like a slow decline until it drops right off the edge of a cliff.

This fic feels like AI wrote it, what with Kakashi the mc having an entire bloody lecture teaching his students while fighting Zabuza, this would be fine if it were not for him speaking entire paragraphs while doing high-speed movements like using chidori. No way in heck can you spit out 2-3 sentences before your hand is already through his chest, it is unrealistic. Also what with Kakashi naming it specifically as an A rank Ninjutsu and Sasuke instead saying it was S and is shocked, again feels like what an AI would mistakenly input unless the author fat fingered it and didn't bother proofreading his writing.