I, the model of the righteous path, how can I become a demon!
Shang You stood on the mountain peak and looked at the broken sky above his head as he chanted softly.
Above the green sky, immortals appear, and divine light gathers in the divination of heaven.
The ancient ruins of the Nine Realms were explored, and the treasures of Kunlun were locked in secret boxes.
The Eight Desolates Sects started to fight, and the four sects 'prodigies danced in the sky.
Now that the immortal destiny had descended upon the Nine States, who in the world could ascend?
His gaze was far-reaching, and his pupils constantly reflected images of his past.
After Shang You transmigrated to this world, he worked hard to cultivate and successfully entered the Green Firmament Grotto-heaven with the help of his system that could help others realize their hopes and become stronger.
In the sect, his fellow disciples admired him very much and called him a genius who was willing to help others and an honest scum.
Outside the sect, the disciples of Tian Ji Sect said that he was a genius who was entangled with the sect master. The disciples of Nine Realms Sky Pavilion said that he was a kind person who was entangled with the saintess. The disciples of Karakorum Immortal Mansion said that he was entangled with the sect and that he was a bastard that only appeared once in ten thousand years.
Being loved by Karakorum Immortal Mansion, Shang You had always felt a great pressure.
Later on, Shang You felt even more pressure.
Because he was showing signs of becoming a demon.
The conversation between him and the demonic witch was still vivid in his mind.
"Shang You, you're destined to come to my side."
"Bullshit!"
Sigh, I was really young and frivolous at that time. It would have been better if I had agreed.
Forget it, he didn't want to think about it anymore. It was time to risk his life.
Shang You protected the lights below him and looked at the terrifying figures in the crack in the sky. He raised his sword and said angrily,"Damn it, where are the Ascendant cultivators?" Come and save me! He shouldn't have believed the words of those scammers from the Archaic Mysteries Sect! When I get back, I will beat up the people of Karakorum Immortal Mansion to vent my anger!"
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So far I am enjoying this story, that's a huge plus because it is refreshing and the pacing is good.. i like the change in how the characters attitude but there are so many plot holes like (mainly on aika's awakening) First, when aika's awakening, understandable that ophis's snake makes the sacred gear awakens, however in transforming aika to shinigami is somewhat derailed, in the standard convertion (bleach), strawberry's physical body and soul are separated, Second, when kisuke reiatsu-ki inserted to aika when the transitioning happens, it is supposedly converts aika to a "surrogate shinigami" (strawberry's words) which means, aika is not in the position in transforming to hollow because kisuke supply some of its reiatsu ki to her body, third, when the method of converting to shinigami/hollow the enroachment starts but it should not happen because aika's physical body and soul are not separted and the chain connecting the two is not broken, fourth, when sacred gear of aika has consciousness i am assuming it is the same as their zanpakto but in order for aika to be fully pledge as shinigami it must search its true essence(spirit ribbon:red) and mold its own reiatsu ki (without kisuke's reiatsu ki), in my point of view (as a reader/critic), it should be a great development of the story when aika exhaust all the reiatsu ki given by kisuke following the story flow having a conflict where aika's sacred gears are broken, return as a common story's logic devil reincarnate (which is not because aika is human) with sacred gears awaken, going thru the process of transforming to a real shinigami (a hybrid one because its a dxd world), struggling to not become a hollow, having yoruichi's training and so on and so forth, get's my point? Hahahaha, but still it is my blabbering and theory of all things, hope this will give you ideas on your story development, and no offense, it is just my opinion, feel free to ignore it :)