adriane galisteu e senna

F**k you man 😭😭😭😭 Senna oh senna. I'll drop a better review when I catch up to the latest chapter however this is good. I can't explain it. 👏

Spoilers ahead. If you're the translator, please reply. Writing quality: 10/10 Nothing about China Number One. Character development/design: 0/10 If you read up to the MC's wedding, you'll be disappointed. After the wedding, there's no MC; it's more like a historical account than a novel. You're repeatedly told that the MC has a relationship with Lucy, Senna, and Lia. The only one who actually appears is Lucy. Lia appears sporadically, and shortly after the wedding, you learn that Senna is pregnant with the MC's child, and then she disappears completely, along with her child. Character interaction becomes nonexistent, even between the MC and Lucy. Dear translator, are you going to change that? Even in the ending?

As other comments have said it is a fast paced story no doubt about it. But it is well done for a beginner. Just some tips for the author is that for fan fics, it’s nice for the story to deviate a bit more or like to see sides of characters or interactions we wouldn’t have seen in the original story. Interactions with the main cast with the mc that goes beyond just they did this and then this happened, like actual dialogue. In general more dialogue is needed, there is not enough fleshing of characters, like kisumu that would have been fun to see more fleshed out or issha, or the master disciple relationships in the senna, more stuff about the senna in general. take some creative liberties. Since this is a WebNovel, people are gonna subscribe and tune in every update and you’ll find new people to pick it up. And if you decide to drop its a great learning experience. Expiriment more and read other Naruto fanfics if that’s your thing. But honestly I see potential keep up the great work

Hey author, how about using this idea and writing a BTTH fanfic. The elements in the fanfiction are as follows: 1. Main Character A) A boy named Dai Tian who is the same age as Xiao Yan i.e 15 years old, gets transmigrated from earth, in Wutan Tan City as an orphan. B) He was surprised to find that he has transmigrated into his favorite novel "Battle through the heavens". C) He was even surprised to find that he had Sharingan. D) Then He discovered that he has a system(Heavenly system). The system gave him newbie gift pack that contained: a)Seven Character creation card, a drop of blood is required to create each character. b)Qi Method: Heavenly Devouring mantra(low level yellow technique), an evolving Qi Method that can evolve by devouring natural treasures, not limited to heavenly flames. c)100,000 gold coins. d)Granting 1 star Dou Zhe cultivation. e)Write Appropriate Qi method(low-level yellow Qi Method), which will also grow by devouring natural treasures, for all the 7 individuals created. E) The system will also provide him resources, but he needs to complete missions, thus helping in his growth, as well as the 7 created individuals growth. There is also a system panel where he can check, his and the created individual's, attribute and status. F) He named himself Uchiha Tian after discovering he has Sharingan. G) Uchiha Tian created 7 individuals with the help of system, and accepted them as his brothers, since they are created with his blood. He named them: a) Uchiha Ren b) Uchiha Kai c) Uchiha Senna d) Uchiha Zetsu e) Uchiha Itachi f) Uchiha Obito g) Uchiha Nagato. They are of the same age as Uchiha Tian. H) The Uchiha brothers will all have sharingan, and they have cold characters. I) Dou qi attributes of the brothers are as follows: •Uchiha Tian- Fire,Thunder,Wood.(He will also start practising alchemy) •Uchiha Ren-Fire, Wood.(He will also start practising alchemy) •Uchiha Kai-Thunder, Wind. •Uchiha Senna-Fire, Gold.(He will also start practicing as a weapon refiner) •Uchiha Zetsu- Ice, Dark. •Uchiha Itachi-Fire, Thunder. •Uchiha Obito-Fire, Wood.(He will also start practising alchemy) •Uchiha Nagato- Gold, Wind. J) Uchiha Tian will be the main protagonist, his brothers will be co protagonists. K) Xiao Yan will also become a co protagonist. 2. Setting and Time frame. A)The timeline is set to be at the beginning of the novel "Battle through the heavens", i.e.when Xiao Yan is 15 years old. B)Realms, clans and sects are the same as in the original. 3. Power system & upgrades. A)Follow the original Dou Qi cultivation system. B)Heavenly flame, Dou techniques, Dou skills remain the same. Only Uchiha Tian and his brothers will use their own Dou technique and skills. 4. Story theme and tone. A)Genre: action, adventure, fantasy, dark, romance. B)Focus will be on personal growth, adventure, war. 5. Romance & relationship. A)The love interest of Uchiha Tian and his brothers are: a)Uchiha Tian- Medusa, he will name her Cai Lin later. b)Uchiha Ren- Yun Yun c)Uchiha Kai- Xiao Yi Xian d)Uchiha Senna- Qing Lin e)Uchiha Zetsu- Nalan Yanran f)Uchiha Itachi- Ya Fei g)Uchiha Obito- Zi Yan h)Uchiha Nagato- Xiao Yu B) Xiao Yan's love interest will be Xiao Xun Er. 6. Antagonists and villains. A)Continue with the Hall of souls, Hun clan and Hun Tian Di, as the main villains, or you can add demons from the great thousand world. 7. Chapter & lengths. A)Make it 900+ chapters. B)Word count per chapter is 3300+. C)Plan major arcs every 70 - 120 chapters, with smaller arcs in between.

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