marisol ribeiro

Hi! Just came across "Aeternum Academy" and got hooked instantly. Marisol's Assessment scene is such a strong opening, the pressure of being an F-class scholarship kid in a room full of hero legacies, and then that jaw-dropping twist of being classified Echo-Blooded, Archive subtype, S-class potential. Great power-system worldbuilding. I do manga-style commission art, and stories like this are exactly my thing. Would love to create art based on Marisol in the Assessment chair with the halo of shards around her, or her first look at the House Forge common room. Happy to share my portfolio if you're interested! Discord: emmamaxwell0713 Instagram: mirabellebrushes

Yoo, I came from Facebook✋🏻 The first few chapters are very well-written! There are a tiny bit of grammatical errors (but that's just me being nitpicky), but the story flows very well. Marisol sounds like a very interesting character with being the 'heir' of something dark and mysterious and all. What I'd like to point out is my first impression on your story. The beginning is great— albeit a little confusing. It starts off with Marisol in a sort of forest— and transitions to her in a locked room almost immediately. From this, we can understand that she had tried to run away— and failed. But who is this 'Eri' kid? From the 2nd chapter, we can get that 'Eri' is a stuffed toy, but the first chapter suggests otherwise. Is there something else at play here? Is Eri a separate entity or is it a part of Marisol somehow? Or could she be a persona of hers? Anyway, you kept the mystery to the max. Readers would be hooked! My only advice (or critique) is to focus on pacing. Your synopsis has already spoiled a bit of the start; her parents died in a car crash, she met this guy called Aiden, she's fighting against a cult, etc, etc. Compressing the synopsis to include *only* Marisol and focusing on her *goal* would (in my opinion) be best. For a platform like Webnovel, reading the first few chapters of your story while already knowing all these important information would make it seem boring. It'd be less like a story and more like they're just reviewing a longer version of what's happening. Anyway, that's it. I'll be reading this💪🏻