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Unparalleled After Ten Consecutive Draws

Chu Kuangren has teleported to the cultivation world. With him was a game plug-in that gave him ten consecutive lucky draws right as he began. Congratulations! The host has pulled the Legendary-tier Banished Immortal Aura, the Legendary-tier constitution, Exquisite Nine Orifices Sword Heart, the God-tier constitution, Immortal Body, and one Legendary Winged Soldier… Join Chu Kuangren as he becomes a legend of cosmic proportions, and triumphs over every being in the world!

Carefree Smile · Eastern

After Transmigrating, the Fat Wife Made a Comeback!

Qiao Mei transmigrated into a novel as a supporting character with the same name as her who lacked presence. This supporting character was a country bumpkin who couldn’t get married due to her obesity. According to the original script, this country girl Qiao Mei was a fatty spoiled by her grandfather. However, their relatives were all vicious and cruel people. Her grandfather had poor health, so once he died, the relatives would divide and swallow up his assets. Hence, her grandfather’s greatest wish was to marry Qiao Mei off. For this, even sacrificed and betrayed his good friend’s grandson, Xia Zhe. Grandpa got Xia Zhe drunk and had Qiao Mei forcibly take the strong and handsome Xia Zhe with her body which weighed more than two hundred pounds. Then, grandpa would catch them the next day and force Xia Zhe to marry Qiao Mei. However, that eventually caused the start of Qiao Mei’s unfortunate life. Also, in the original story, Qiao Mei took possession of Xia Zhe’s mysterious jade. But due to Qiao Mei’s stupidity, her cousin's sister had tricked Qiao Mei into giving her the jade, which resulted in the cousin’s family becoming rich. When Qiao Mei transmigrated here, it was during the awkward moment when she was making love to the man after making him drunk. She woke up groggily the next day and grandpa’s team had already appeared at the door. Qiao Mei was frightened. She didn’t want to proceed on the original path and marry a man who didn’t love her. And so, she lied and chased grandpa away. She also pushed the man out before forcing herself to look at her tanned and chubby reflection in the mirror! Alas, she cried at her ugly appearance… Like a sumo wrestler in large cloth underwear, even the plus-sized apparel shops didn’t have clothes in her size. And her face was the size of a pizza, a scorched pizza! Qiao Mei decided to reform her life! The first step, lose weight! The second step, clean up her room! She used to be particular about cleanliness, and although her current house had a huge courtyard, she could only describe it as messy! The third step was to hold onto the jade tightly so her greedy cousin wouldn’t stand a chance! Only, wasn’t the tall and handsome Xia Zhe supposed to hate her according to the original story? Why was he being nicer and nicer to her?

Mountain Springs · Urban

Relentless Pursuit After Divorce

When the pure lotus provoked her, she slapped her instantly, "It's just a pair of worn-out shoes. If you want them so desperately, take them and wear them." President Jones intruded with a cheeky face, "Wife, even if they're worn-out shoes, I'd only let you wear them." "Scram!" ... 【One man, one woman】Four years ago, she left in fury with the bun in her oven. Four years later— "Uncle, I noticed that your face has a gloomy look, it looks like you have excessive liver heat. It's obvious you lack a wife. Do you want to get to know my mommy?" The president who remained aloof from women looking at his mini-me, his eyes deepened. He immediately packed up the mother and child, and brought them back home, pampered them to the point of annoying everyone. Someone asked, "President Jones, isn't this a bit too unreasonable?" The president smirked coldly, "You expect me to be reasonable when pleasing my wife?" This is a story about an overbearing President Jones, who's fiercely dominant, and unreasonable in pampering his wife.

The nightingale lives · General

CEO Wants To Marry Me After Divorce

# WIFE-CHASING "Honey, let's make a deal." "What deal?" "From this day forward, I will take care of you the rest of your life while you take care of the rest of me!" "Dream on!" [Sweet conversation of a couple] Four years ago, she left angrily while she was pregnant. Four years later... "Hey, I can see that you are having bad luck, and you get frustrated easily. Sir, you need a wife. My mom is single. Would you like to date her?" The chaste CEO gazed at the mini version of him before him with his dark eyes. He said nothing and brought the child and the mother home.

The nightingale lives · Urban

After Surviving the Apocalypse, I Built a City in Another World

[Congratulations, Terran survivor #99598, for activating the Universe Assistance System!] Althea, along with the remaining 1% of the population of their home planet, stared at the holographic screen in front of them in confusion. Their galaxy was apparently ending, and suddenly announcements from an alien system appeared in their heads, telling them they would be permanently transferred to another world. The survivors were all very depressed. First, they were forced to survive in a zombie apocalypse, and now they had to survive a new world altogether? It just so happened that Althea was one of the few people who got the Lord Token, the ticket to controlling a territory---a supposed safe haven for her people. Althea looked at her very large stomach and sighed at an unknown future. Would she be able to build a good home for her children? And... would she and her husband find each other again? #Apocalypse, #Josei, #Romance, #BeautifulFL, #HandsomeML, #PowerCouple, #Infrastructure, #MagicSpace, #KingdomBuilding, #Adventure, #Pregnancy, #Game Elements, #System #LitRPG ____ Now an E-BOOK~! Please rate, ne? WILL HELP US OUT SOOO MUCHH~! Book 1: AMAZON: https://a.co/d/hy7Rocr GOODREADS: https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/203724162-after-surviving-the-apocalypse-i-built-a-city-in-another-world ____ READERS LOUNGE NOW OPEN~! (Readers ONLY please!) https://discord.gg/w8qKw2yaNK

NispedanaSan · Fantasy

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The strengths Writing Style Characters Story Development Very detailed and immersive. There was no problem with the flow and style. It kept me hooked for more until the last chapter. Character dynamics and relationship with he characters are well written. Cons Capitalization of words after the comma. I found some irregularities with the words after the comma. Unless it's a proper noun words should be kept in lower case of its following the comma. There's no syntax or major grammar issue I found other than that.

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Sorry I felt like I had to comment on the "—" thing you said. Those are em dashes (yes, that's their name), and they function basically as a parenthesis or a comma. They are usually used in literature to add detail, contrast, extra information, etc. They are to not be used right after a comma and you shouldn't use them before a comma either, but it is also customary to use them at the end of a sentence, before the period. No, I still haven't read the story, but it looks promising, so I don't regret giving you a 4.4

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Dropped at ch6. Main reason - abysmal writing quality (2/5). Bland and ****** language I can stomack, its a light novel, not classical literature, but the way the Author uses punctuations is just... I have no words. I guess, he thinks you put comma wherever you pause in your speech, even if you pause to take breath. Or, more plausible explanation, his keyboard is malfunctioning and the comma key is jammed, firing on its own every now and then. "he asked, Joe what was happening" <-- not even the worst, I've seen in one place he put comma after "the", like "think about the, level up function".

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